视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use linking words and specific details (what ‘toba leg’ refers to, types of scenes you photograph). Keep to 2–4 sentences and correct tense and article use.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially around my hometown. I live near Medan, a busy metropolitan city close to Lake Toba, and I like photographing its lakeside scenery and city skyline. If I have free time, I usually visit those spots to capture sunrise or sunset views.

建议: Clarify preference (urban or rural) and avoid saying both at once. Use correct grammar and more specific vocabulary (rice paddies, meadows). Use one linking phrase to connect reason and example. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are more natural and peaceful. For example, I enjoy photographing rice paddies, open meadows and village sports fields, which make me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

建议: Give a clear preference and support it with specific reasons and examples. Fix grammar (plural/singular, articles) and replace vague phrases like ‘geographical few’ with ‘landscapes’ or ‘geography’. Use a linking word (however/although) for contrast. Keep answer concise.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I want new experiences and different landscapes, such as mountains or temperate coastlines. However, I also love my country’s tropical scenery, like lush rainforests and sandy beaches.

× Yes I do, especially my working home.

✓ Yes, I do, especially my workplace at home.

The phrase 'working home' is ungrammatical. Use 'workplace' or 'place where I work' and add comma after 'Yes'. 'At home' clarifies location. Use articles as needed ('my workplace').

× Working town now called Medan is a metropolitan city and has toba leg.

✓ The town where I work now, called Medan, is a metropolitan city and has Lake Toba.

Preposition and word order are incorrect. Use 'where I work now' to modify 'town'. 'Toba leg' appears to be incorrect vocabulary; likely 'Lake Toba'. Proper nouns should be capitalized and 'has' can describe the presence of a lake. Commas set off the clause 'called Medan'.

× I will go there if there is a leisure time so as I can take a picture of scenic view.

✓ I go there when I have free time so I can take pictures of the scenic views.

Tense and phrasing are awkward. Use present simple to describe habitual action: 'I go there when I have free time'. 'Leisure time' is less natural than 'free time'. Use plural 'pictures' and 'scenic views' and connect clauses with 'so' or 'so that'.

× I prefer urban rural areas because uh rural areas are have natural view, for example, the Paddy field, the field, soccer field and so on.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they have natural views, for example paddy fields, meadows, and soccer fields.

The student said 'urban rural areas' which is contradictory; choose one ('rural areas'). 'Are have' is incorrect; use 'have'. Nouns for kinds of fields should be plural and lowercased unless proper nouns. 'The field' is vague; 'meadows' or 'open fields' is better. Remove filler 'uh'.

× I I feel happy when I go to the rural area because I feel nostalgia.

✓ I feel happy when I go to rural areas because I feel nostalgic.

Duplicate 'I I' should be single 'I'. 'Nostalgia' is a noun; use the adjective 'nostalgic' to describe a feeling. Use plural 'rural areas' for general statements.

× For new experience I prefer other country because I would like to see other geographical few.

✓ For a new experience, I prefer other countries because I would like to see different geographical features.

Need article 'a' before 'new experience'. Use plural 'countries' to match general preference. 'Geographical few' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'geographical features' or 'landscapes'. Also add commas for clarity.

× Yet I I also love my country view because my country has a tropical climate and.

✓ I also love the views of my country because it has a tropical climate.

Remove duplicate 'I'. 'Country view' is awkward; use 'views of my country' or 'my country's scenery'. 'My country has a tropical climate' is fine, but sentence ended with 'and.' Remove the dangling conjunction. Use 'the views' with definite article to refer to specific scenery.