视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific reasons or an example, using a linking word (because/so) to make it coherent. Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially sunrises and sunsets. I prefer these because the soft colours and changing light create dramatic photos. For example, I like capturing flowing water at dawn because the long exposure makes it look silky and peaceful.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Explain what you mean by "different lights" with an example to be more precise.

示例: I usually prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more natural. For instance, forests and open fields offer varied lighting at sunrise and sunset, which makes photos more atmospheric and less cluttered than city scenes.

建议: Provide a direct answer first and then support it with specific, coherent details. Remove filler words (like, so, I live) and correct small grammar mistakes. Use linking words (because/for example) to connect ideas and describe precise sensory details.

示例: I prefer views in my own country, mainly because I live in a village where I can see sunrises and sunsets from my roof. For example, the soft colours and clear light at dawn create beautiful skies that are easy to photograph and enjoy.

× I do like taking pictures of different views, but I especially likes sunrise and sunset pictures.

✓ I do like taking pictures of different views, but I especially like sunrise and sunset pictures.

The subject 'I' requires the base form of the verb without the -s ending. 'Likes' is third person singular and incorrect with 'I'. Use 'like'. Suggestion: Use 'I like' not 'I likes'.

× So also I like water, like water flowing.

✓ I also like water, such as flowing water.

The original word order is awkward and repetitive. 'So also' is incorrect phrasing; 'I also like' is natural. Replace 'like water flowing' with 'such as flowing water' or 'flowing water' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I also like flowing water' or 'I also like water, such as flowing water'.

× And I like really these pictures.

✓ And I really like these pictures.

Word order is incorrect. Adverb 'really' should come before the verb 'like' to modify it. Move 'really' before 'like'. Suggestion: Say 'I really like these pictures.'

× Yeah, it's it's really good for me and I really like that.

✓ Yeah, it's really good for me, and I really like that.

There is a doubled filler 'it's it's' which is a spoken hesitation error; remove the duplicate. Also add a comma before 'and' for readability. Suggestion: Use 'it's really good for me'.

× I usually prefer view in rural area, rural areas, because they there's a lot of forest there and there is a lot of different lights.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because there are a lot of forests there and a lot of different lights.

Number agreement errors: 'view' should be plural 'views' to match general preference; 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area'. 'They there's' is ungrammatical; use 'there are'. 'A lot of forest' is better as 'a lot of forests' or 'a lot of forested areas' when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'I usually prefer views in rural areas because there are many forests and varied lighting.'

× So I think so, yeah.

✓ So I think so, yeah.

This sentence is conversational and not grammatically incorrect; no correction needed. (No change required.)

× Like it's dependable on the area, but I do like my own country.

✓ It depends on the area, but I do like my own country.

'Dependable on' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'depends on'. This is a verb usage issue related to collocation rather than a quantifier, but it fits list rules to correct the phrase. Suggestion: Use 'It depends on the area.'

× Like where I live, I live in a village.

✓ I live in a village where I can see the sunrise and sunset clearly.

Repetition 'Like where I live, I live' is redundant. Combine into one clear sentence: 'I live in a village.' Also add context in next clause to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Say 'I live in a village' and then 'From my roof I can see the sunrise and sunset clearly.'

× So, so from my, from my home roof, I can see sunrise and sunset clearly.

✓ So, from my home roof, I can see the sunrise and sunset clearly.

Article 'the' is needed before 'sunrise' and 'sunset' when referring to specific daily events visible from a location. The repeated 'so, so' and 'from my, from my' are disfluencies; remove duplicates. Suggestion: 'From my roof I can see the sunrise and sunset clearly.'

× That was so beautiful.

✓ That is so beautiful.

The speaker is describing a current or habitual observation; present tense 'is' is more appropriate. Using past tense 'was' suggests it no longer applies. Suggestion: Use present tense when describing ongoing or regular experiences.

× They're soft colors and the like, like the light is very, very bright.

✓ They are soft colors, and the light is very bright.

'They're soft colors' is acceptable but 'and the like, like the light' is repetitive and awkward. Remove 'the like' and the duplicated 'like'. Also simplify 'very, very' to 'very' or keep one for emphasis. Suggestion: 'They are soft colors, and the light is very bright.'

× So I like that.

✓ So I like that.

This short sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.