视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện cấu trúc và tính mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp, tránh câu dài lủng củng và lỗi ngữ pháp. Sử dụng 1-2 câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi thêm một câu chi tiết hỗ trợ với liên từ phù hợp. Chú ý động từ thời và phát âm số/ danh từ (ví dụ: "one of my favorites", "variety -> variety in").

示例: Yes, I do. I used to enjoy photography when I worked with a photographer, so taking pictures is one of my favorite hobbies. For example, I like capturing the same scene from different angles to add variety to my photo album.

建议: Làm rõ ý chính và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể, dùng liên từ phù hợp. Tránh lỗi cấu trúc như "in open areas" vs "urban areas" và các cụm từ lộn xộn. Nên so sánh rõ ràng: nêu sở thích, sau đó đưa ví dụ cụ thể về cảnh/ chi tiết mà bạn thích chụp.

示例: I like both urban and rural views. In cities I enjoy photographing modern architecture and busy streets because they show the character of a place, whereas in rural areas I prefer natural landscapes and traditional houses which feel peaceful and authentic.

建议: Trình bày rõ ràng, tránh nói lặp và cụm từ mơ hồ. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu quan điểm, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn với ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh từ không chính xác như "rough in on the cities" và thêm liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad. My country has many beautiful landscapes and charming towns, but I also like visiting other countries to experience different cultures and discover new scenery.

× You know I used to when we come a photographer so taking pictures is one of my favorite 1 and especially I can take a picture from different views so I can variety my my album and my scenery.

✓ You know I used to take pictures when we had a photographer, so taking pictures is one of my favorite hobbies; especially I can take photos from different viewpoints to vary my album and scenery.

This sentence has multiple errors: incorrect tense and verb forms (used to + missing verb, come -> had, taking pictures -> infinitive form needed in context), sentence structure problems and wrong word choice (variety -> vary, views -> viewpoints, 'favorite 1' unclear likely 'favorite hobbies'). Suggestion: break into shorter clauses, use 'used to + base verb' for past habitual actions, use 'when we had a photographer' for past context, and use 'vary' as a verb. Ensure articles and nouns are correct and avoid repeating words. Grammar problem type ID:6,26,26

× Well, I love both of them because in open areas I can take a photo of many modern city and it can reflect the ground of that country.

✓ Well, I love both because in open urban areas I can take photos of many modern cities and they can reflect the character of that country.

Errors: incorrect preposition/phrase 'in open areas' is acceptable but 'in open urban areas' is clearer; 'take a photo of many modern city' has plural/singular mismatch and article errors (city -> cities). 'It can reflect the ground' is incorrect collocation; use 'they can reflect the character' or 'the character of that country.' Suggestion: match nouns and verbs in number, use appropriate collocations (character/landscape), and ensure noun plurality aligns with verbs. Grammar problem type ID:1,11,13

× Moreover, in the rural areas and can take a photo of a natural and resident house.

✓ Moreover, in rural areas I can take photos of natural scenery and traditional houses where residents live.

Problems: missing subject 'I' and awkward noun phrases 'a natural and resident house.' This is a sentence structure error and incorrect word choice. Suggestion: include subject and use natural collocations: 'natural scenery' and 'traditional houses' or 'residents' houses.' Ensure verbs agree with subject and nouns are plural when appropriate. Grammar problem type ID:26,13

× I love both of them, you know, I know my country is not completely rough in on the cities, but you also have the beautiful scenery and well.

✓ I love both, you know. I know my country is not completely rough in the cities, but it also has beautiful scenery.

Errors: redundant phrases and awkward preposition 'in on the cities.' 'You also have' is inappropriate for describing one's own country; use 'it also has.' 'and well' is incomplete. This is present tense usage but primarily sentence structure and preposition errors. Suggestion: remove redundancy, fix prepositions ('in the cities'), and use correct subject pronoun 'it' for the country. Grammar problem type ID:6,11,26