视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce fillers and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence then one specific supporting detail. Use linking words for coherence and limit to 2–3 short sentences. Focus on correct verb forms (e.g., 'taking pictures'), countable nouns ('a picture' or 'pictures'), and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often change my angle to capture unique details, because a slight change in perspective can make a scene much more attractive.

建议: Decide on a clear preference and explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however'). Use correct vocabulary ('rural' not 'rare') and simpler sentence structures to avoid confusion.

示例: I prefer rural views because they often reflect traditional landscapes and peaceful scenery. However, I also like urban views sometimes for their busy streets and modern architecture, which can be interesting to photograph.

建议: Be concise and accurate: state your current preference, give a reason, and mention future intentions with correct verb forms. Avoid unnecessary repetition and fix grammar ('another country', 'take pictures'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'but'.

示例: At the moment I prefer views in my own country, especially the hills, because I know them well and enjoy their scenery. But I have seen beautiful places abroad on social media, so if I have the chance, I would definitely travel and take pictures there.

× Yes, I like to taking picture of different views umm every single angle uh makes picture different umm, sometimes uh it uh it call it a good view and sometimes uh different uh angle picture make attractive.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. Every single angle makes a picture different. Sometimes it is called a good view, and sometimes a picture taken from a different angle becomes attractive.

Multiple errors: 'like to taking' mixes infinitive and gerund; use either 'like to take' or 'like taking' (Rule: after like, gerund or infinitive allowed—choose gerund here). 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'different views' (singular/plural). 'makes picture different' needs an article: 'makes a picture different'. 'it call it a good view' is incorrect passive/subject form; correct is 'it is called a good view' or 'people call it a good view'. 'different angle picture make attractive' has word order, article and verb agreement errors: use 'a picture taken from a different angle becomes attractive' or 'a different-angle picture is attractive'. Suggestions: use gerund after like, check singular/plural and add articles where needed, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct passive or active constructions.

× Umm, actually I think uh, rare areas it's preferable. Like also for rare areas reflect, uh, traditional, but I prefer urban areas too, or sometimes some way busy to whereas urban areas and talking picture.

✓ Actually, I think rural areas are preferable. Rural areas also reflect tradition, but I prefer urban areas too, especially when they are busy and I am taking pictures there.

Errors: 'rare areas' is the wrong adjective; the intended word is 'rural'. 'it's preferable' has subject mismatch; use plural 'rural areas are preferable'. 'for rare areas reflect, traditional' is ungrammatical—needs subject and verb: 'Rural areas reflect tradition' or 'Rural areas reflect traditional culture'. 'some way busy to whereas urban areas and talking picture' is disordered and wrong word forms. Correction clarifies meaning and uses proper adjective 'rural', correct verb 'are', and fixes phrase order. Suggestions: choose correct adjective, match subject and verb number, and simplify complex phrases into clear clauses like 'especially when they are busy and I am taking pictures'.

× Oh, I didn't go to the another country, so currently I prefer my own country hills.

✓ Oh, I haven't been to another country, so currently I prefer the hills in my own country.

Errors: 'didn't go to the another country' uses wrong tense and incorrect article 'the' before 'another country' (use 'another' without 'the'). Better to use present perfect 'haven't been to' to indicate life experience up to now. 'my own country hills' needs reordering and an article: 'the hills in my own country' or 'my country's hills'. Suggestions: use 'another' alone (no 'the'), use present perfect for experiences ('have/has been'), and place modifiers in correct order ('the hills in my own country').

× Even in social media I saw a lot of better views in other countries.

✓ Even on social media I see many better views from other countries.

Errors: 'in social media' should be 'on social media'. 'I saw' is past tense, but the meaning suggests an ongoing or general observation—present simple 'I see' fits better. 'a lot of better views' is awkward; use 'many better views' or 'a lot of great views'. Also 'in other countries' better as 'from other countries'. Suggestions: use correct preposition 'on' for platforms, choose tense consistent with general statements (present simple), and use natural quantifiers ('many' or 'a lot of').

× So if I got a chance here, definitely I will go to the another country and taking picture with that fuse.

✓ So if I get a chance, I will definitely go to another country and take pictures of those places.

Errors: Conditional tense mismatch: use 'if I get a chance' (first conditional) rather than 'if I got a chance' when following with 'I will'. 'the another country' incorrectly uses 'the' with 'another'. 'taking picture' uses gerund incorrectly after 'will'; use base verb 'take' with future auxiliary. 'that fuse' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation of 'those places' or 'that view'; corrected to 'those places'. Suggestions: match conditional forms ('if' + present, 'will' + base verb), remove 'the' before 'another', use plural 'pictures', and replace unclear words with intended nouns like 'places' or 'views'.