视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid grammatical errors (e.g., 'enjoy to go' → 'enjoy going') and unclear phrases ('places that pictures speak'). Name the location clearly and give a short reason why it was good for photos.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I recently visited a new park on Airport Road which had landscaped gardens and a lake, so the lighting and reflections were ideal for photography.

建议: Give a direct opinion first and then briefly explain reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'urban' not 'urban region'), correct collocations ('mind-blowing' as one word), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Provide one clear example with specific details about what you saw.

示例: I prefer urban views because I like the architecture and vibrant street scenes. However, I recently visited Uluma Rock and really enjoyed the natural scenery; the dramatic cliffs and sweeping valleys were spectacular, which reminded me how much variety there is.

建议: Answer directly and succinctly: state your preference, explain why with specific reasons, and avoid repetitive phrases ('various places... various areas'). Mention a concrete example with details about what makes the view impressive. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad and I love the diversity of local landscapes. For instance, Ulumur Rock offers dramatic panoramas and unique rock formations, which make it one of my favourite places to visit.

× I actually enjoy to go to pick places that pictures speak where I can take very nice pictures.

✓ I actually enjoy going to picturesque places where I can take very nice pictures.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb in the -ing form, not an infinitive. 'to go to pick places that pictures speak' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'going to picturesque places'. Use 'going to' + gerund and replace awkward phrase with the adjective 'picturesque' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'enjoy' + verb-ing (enjoy going, enjoy seeing) and choose clear adjectives (picturesque) rather than literal translations.

× For instance, I was at 1 Park that was recently built at the Airport Road and the place was absolutely perfect for a very nice picture.

✓ For instance, I was at a park that was recently built on Airport Road, and the place was absolutely perfect for taking very nice pictures.

The original has several structure issues: '1 Park' is incorrect (use 'a park' or the park's name), 'at the Airport Road' should be 'on Airport Road', and 'perfect for a very nice picture' is better as 'perfect for taking very nice pictures'. Use correct preposition for roads ('on') and parallel verb phrase 'for taking'. Suggestion: Use 'a park' if unnamed, 'on' for roads, and 'perfect for taking (photos)'.

× Well, I think I actually prefer views in the urban region rather than the rural region.

✓ Well, I think I actually prefer views in urban areas rather than rural areas.

'Urban region' and 'rural region' are awkward here; the plural countable noun 'areas' suits the meaning. Use consistent parallel nouns: 'in urban areas rather than rural areas'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'urban areas'/'rural areas'.

× But recently I've been going to some really rural areas and I've been enjoying some very natural views.

✓ But recently I've been going to some really rural areas and have enjoyed some very natural views.

The speaker used present perfect continuous twice; while not strictly incorrect, 'I've been enjoying' is awkward after 'I've been going'. Using simple present perfect 'have enjoyed' fits better to describe experiences obtained during recent visits. Either keep continuous for ongoing actions or use perfect for completed experiences. Suggestion: Use consistent tense: 'I've been going... and have enjoyed...' or 'I went... and enjoyed...' depending on intended meaning.

× For instance, I was at Uluma Rock some weeks ago and it was just a mind blowing experience for me.

✓ For instance, I was at Uluma Rock some weeks ago, and it was just a mind-blowing experience for me.

Compound adjective 'mind-blowing' should be hyphenated when before or after a noun; hyphenation improves readability. Also adding a comma before 'and' improves flow. No article needed before a proper name like 'Uluma Rock'. Suggestion: Use hyphen for compound adjectives and punctuation for clarity.

× I got to see a lot of sights.

✓ I got to see a lot of sights while I was there.

The sentence is short and grammatically acceptable, but adding a clause 'while I was there' clarifies context and connects it to previous sentence. If keeping concise, 'I saw a lot of sights' is also natural. Suggestion: Use 'I saw a lot of sights' or expand for clarity.

× Considering the fact that I have never really been abroad, I have always been in my home country my entire life, I would say that I prefer views in my own country.

✓ Considering the fact that I have never really been abroad and have always lived in my home country my entire life, I would say that I prefer views in my own country.

The clause 'I have always been in my home country my entire life' is awkward; use 'have always lived in my home country' to express continuous residence. Combining clauses with 'and' avoids comma splicing. Suggestion: Use 'have never been abroad and have always lived in...' and avoid comma splices by joining clauses correctly.

× If I can say that, because I've been to various places in this country, various areas, and I would say that the views are absolutely amazing.

✓ If I can say that, it's because I've been to various places and areas in this country, and I would say that the views are absolutely amazing.

The original has a fragment 'If I can say that, because...' which creates a sentence fragment. Add 'it's' to complete the clause: 'If I can say that, it's because...'. Also combine 'places' and 'areas' more smoothly. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments by ensuring 'if' clauses are followed by a main clause.

× For instance, the Ulumur Rock.

✓ For instance, Ulumur Rock.

When referring to named natural features like 'Ulumur Rock', the definite article 'the' is usually unnecessary unless part of the established name. Remove 'the' for natural-sounding reference. Suggestion: Use the proper name without 'the' unless the name conventionally includes it.