视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar; use a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy and fix errors. Mention specific details (what you photograph, frequency, and purpose) and use linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing outdoor views because my country has beautiful scenery. For example, I often visit the local park to capture sunrise over the lake and close-ups of the trees. I usually go twice a week to practice composition and sometimes make short videos to share on social media.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and correct comparative phrasing. Give a clear reason and specific example, and link ideas with connectors like "because" or "for instance."

示例: I prefer urban views because the skyline and architecture are more vibrant and varied. For instance, I enjoy photographing glass skyscrapers at dusk and historic façades in the old town. Also, I like walking with my dog through different neighborhoods and filming short clips for my social feed.

建议: Make the topic sentence clear and fix grammar and word choice. Use coherent linking phrases and provide specific contrasts between domestic and foreign views. Avoid long, confused sentences.

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because I can explore a wide variety of landscapes and local traditions. For example, one weekend I might visit dramatic coastal cliffs and the next I could hike through lush hills. Although foreign scenery can be exciting and novel, I find familiar places more comfortable and easier to appreciate.

× I often go to the local park to capture landscapes and something sometimes film short videos of the trees and lake.

✓ I often go to the local park to capture landscapes and sometimes film short videos of the trees and lake.

The original sentence has an incorrect insertion "something" which disrupts the parallel structure of the verbs 'capture' and 'film'. Remove 'something' so both verbs share the same subject and form. Maintain simple present tense for habitual actions: 'go... to capture... and sometimes film...'. Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and avoid extraneous words.

× I prefer urban views because the city skyline and architecture look more vibrant and interesting when rural scenery.

✓ I prefer urban views because the city skyline and architecture look more vibrant and interesting than rural scenery.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'when' to compare urban and rural scenery. Use a comparative structure with 'than' to compare two things. Also keep verb agreement with plural subject 'skyline and architecture' and the comparative 'more... than'. Suggestion: use 'than' for comparisons: 'more... than ...'.

× I also enjoy walking around the city with my dog or friend and filming short videos for social media.

✓ I also enjoy walking around the city with my dog or a friend and filming short videos for social media.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the article 'a' before 'friend' when listing a non-specific person. This is an article error tied to noun phrase; however the main structure uses gerunds correctly. Add 'a' to make 'a friend' grammatically correct. Suggestion: include articles for singular countable nouns.

× I prefer the views in my own country because I live exploring the variety of landscapes and local traditions, where, for example, I can visit coast lead cliffs one weekend and lush hills the next.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I love exploring the variety of landscapes and local traditions; for example, I can visit coastal cliffs one weekend and lush hills the next.

The original has 'I live exploring' which is incorrect — likely intended 'I love exploring'. Also 'coast lead cliffs' is incorrect word choice and word order; use 'coastal cliffs'. Use a semicolon or a clearer connector instead of an awkward 'where' clause. Maintain present simple to express general preference and habit. Suggestion: use correct verb 'love', correct adjective 'coastal', and clearer sentence connectors.

× In familiar places also feels comfortable and relaxing, whereas views abroad are exciting because they are new and different.

✓ Familiar places also feel comfortable and relaxing, whereas views abroad are exciting because they are new and different.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject-verb agreement and word order: 'In familiar places also feels' is incorrect. The subject should be 'familiar places' (plural) followed by the verb 'feel'. Place the adverb 'also' after the subject or after the verb: 'Familiar places also feel...' preserves natural word order. Suggestion: ensure subject comes before verb and agrees in number; place adverbs appropriately.