视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'traveling vacations' → 'when I travel'; 'I can be memorize' → 'I can remember'). Avoid repetition and keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. When I travel I like to photograph landscapes and city scenes because photos help me remember the places I visit. For example, I always take shots of coastal views and local markets so I can look back on the trip later.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons, using linking words to connect ideas. Use correct noun phrases (e.g., 'mountains and waterfalls') and avoid filler words like 'so' at the end.

示例: I prefer rural views. This is because the countryside offers natural landscapes like mountains and waterfalls, which feel peaceful and fresh. For instance, I enjoy hiking in forests and photographing waterfalls when I visit rural areas.

建议: Answer directly and then give specific comparisons. Improve grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'the views in other countries such as New Zealand and the United States' and 'Malaysia has many city buildings and fewer natural areas'). Limit to 2–3 supporting sentences and avoid repeating 'so'.

示例: I prefer views in other countries, especially places like New Zealand and the United States, because they have diverse natural scenery. In contrast, Malaysia’s cities are more built-up, so I find it easier to enjoy nature abroad when I travel.

× Yes, definitely it is, especially in my traveling vacation.

✓ Yes, definitely. I especially enjoy taking pictures when I travel.

The original has awkward structure and unnecessary words ('it is', 'traveling vacation'). This is a sentence structure error: reorganize into a clear subject and verb. Use 'when I travel' to indicate time and 'enjoy taking pictures' to match the question.

× It is because I can capture different scenery between the travel between the vacation.

✓ It's because I can capture different scenery during my trips or vacations.

The phrase 'between the travel between the vacation' is ungrammatical and repetitive. Replace with 'during my trips or vacations'. This corrects misuse of prepositional phrases and improves verb/preposition usage.

× So I can be memorize all the memory and make it memorable.

✓ So I can remember all the moments and make them memorable.

'Be memorize' is incorrect (wrong verb form) and 'all the memory' is awkward; 'remember' is the correct verb and 'moments' or 'memories' with proper pronoun 'them' fixes the pronoun reference. This addresses incorrect verb formation and pronoun use.

× In my perspective, I totally prefer the views in the rural areas.

✓ From my perspective, I definitely prefer views in rural areas.

Use 'from my perspective' rather than 'in my perspective'. 'Definitely' is more natural than 'totally' here. Also plural 'views in rural areas' without 'the' sounds more natural.

× That is because about the rural areas we can see a lot of scenery about the mountain, the waterfall or about all of the nature, so.

✓ That's because in rural areas we can see a lot of scenic features like mountains, waterfalls, and other natural sights.

Replace 'about the rural areas' with 'in rural areas' and avoid repeated 'about'. Use 'scenic features like' and plural nouns 'mountains, waterfalls' for natural examples. Remove trailing filler 'so'. This fixes preposition misuse and awkward phrasing.

× So for me, I totally prefer the views in other countries such as New Zealand and America.

✓ For me, I prefer the views in other countries such as New Zealand and the United States.

Use 'for me' at the start without 'so'. 'Totally' is informal; 'prefer' suffices. Use correct country name 'the United States' instead of 'America'. This corrects prepositional and naming issues.

× That's because as we know Malaysia is a country which is include a lot of buildings in the city.

✓ That's because, as we know, Malaysia has many buildings in its cities.

'Which is include' is incorrect structure; use 'has' to express possession. Add commas around 'as we know' for clarity and 'in its cities' is more grammatical than 'in the city'. This fixes sentence structure and verb usage.

× So it's lack of natural scenery.

✓ So it lacks natural scenery.

'It's lack of' is incorrect; use the verb 'lacks' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This corrects preposition/verb misuse and subject-verb form.

× So I am the person who prefer their natural scenery.

✓ So I am the kind of person who prefers natural scenery.

Original mixes singular subject 'I' with plural pronoun 'their' and uses 'prefer' without third-person singular '-s'. Change to 'kind of person who prefers' to match subject-verb agreement and avoid incorrect pronoun use.