视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repeating ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Use slightly more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'landscapes' instead of repeating 'views') and correct small collocation errors like 'in the background.'

示例: Yes—I love photographing different scenes, especially landscapes and cityscapes when I travel. For example, when I visit a new place with my family, I often photograph natural vistas at sunrise and candid portraits of my relatives with the scenery in the background.

建议: Avoid repetition and correct minor fluency issues. Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one example, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example.' Eliminate filler words and double words.

示例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural scenery and tranquillity. For example, I like photographing mountains and wildlife in natural light, which makes me feel calm and inspired.

建议: Be concise and avoid repetition. Provide one clear reason with a specific example, and correct grammar ('I have been to in the past couple of years' → 'I have visited in recent years'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer scenery in other countries because they offer diverse cultures and landscapes. For example, during recent trips to Japan and Thailand I photographed temple gardens and coastal scenes that were very different from the landscapes at home.

× I particularly enjoy taking views when I travel with my family.

✓ I particularly enjoy taking views when I travel with my family.

No change needed: sentence is grammatically correct. 'Views' (plural) matches context of multiple scenes photographed while traveling.

× I enjoy taking photos of my loved ones with a beautiful view on the background.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of my loved ones with a beautiful view in the background.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'background' to indicate something located behind the subject. 'On the background' is incorrect in this context. Suggestion: say 'in the background' for natural English.

× I prefer views in rural areas rather than in the urban areas because I am more into nature.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas because I am more into nature.

Remove the unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'urban areas' to match natural usage and parallel structure. Also 'rather than urban areas' is more concise. Ensure parallel noun phrases: 'in rural areas' and 'urban areas'.

× I find it peaceful and fascinating to capture the mountains and animals in natural light.

✓ I find it peaceful and fascinating to capture mountains and animals in natural light.

Remove the definite article 'the' before 'mountains' and 'animals' to refer to these objects in general. Using 'the' implies specific mountains or animals; omitting it makes the sentence general and more natural here.

× I find them I I always find myself in awe.

✓ I always find myself in awe.

Original contains repetition and an extraneous 'them' and duplicate 'I'. Remove the redundant words to produce a single clear clause. Suggest proofreading to catch typing or repetition errors.

× Honestly, I prefer views in foreign countries such as Japan, Thailand and Taiwan, where I have been to the past couple of years.

✓ Honestly, I prefer views in foreign countries such as Japan, Thailand and Taiwan, which I have visited in the past couple of years.

Use 'visited' (simple past or present perfect) with 'have' for completed actions: 'have visited'. Also use 'which' rather than 'where' to refer to the countries as objects of 'visited'. 'Been to' is informal and requires 'have been to' without 'to' after 'been'. Better: 'which I have visited' or 'that I have been to'.

× I prefer view views in these countries because they offer a wide variety of culture and scenery which is far different from my country.

✓ I prefer views in these countries because they offer a wide variety of cultures and scenery that are quite different from my country.

Remove the duplicated word 'view'. 'Culture' should be plural ('cultures') when referring to multiple countries. Use 'scenery' (uncountable) is fine; to agree, use 'that are' referring to 'cultures and scenery' or restructure: 'which are quite different from those in my country.' 'Far different' is acceptable but 'quite different' is more natural.