视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce repetition, produce a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (e.g., “uh”) and correct minor grammar (use “I'd rather” or “I prefer”). Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Not really. I prefer to enjoy a scene in person rather than photograph it because I like noticing small details and the atmosphere. Also, I don't have a good camera phone, so the photos often don't capture what I see.

建议: Start with a complete topic sentence and connect ideas with a linking word. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “cityscapes,” “night skyline”) and avoid vague fillers. Provide one specific example of what you find attractive in urban views.

示例: I prefer urban views, especially at night, because cityscapes look dramatic with illuminated buildings and reflections. For example, I enjoy the skyline when lights from skyscrapers and streets create a lively, glittering atmosphere.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence followed by a clear reason and a specific example. Use natural phrasing (e.g., “I prefer views in my own country because I grew up there and appreciate the seasonal changes”) and avoid awkward expressions like “seasons flow.” Add a brief detail to support your feeling.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up in Japan and feel a strong connection to its seasonal landscapes. For instance, I love seeing cherry blossoms in spring and the vivid autumn foliage, which remind me of home and family traditions.

× To be honest, no. To be honest, no. I rather look at the scene, beautiful scenery and uh.

✓ To be honest, no. I would rather look at the scene and enjoy the beautiful scenery.

This sentence repeats the phrase 'To be honest, no.' unnecessarily and has sentence structure issues. The modal preference expression in English uses 'would rather' + base verb, so 'I rather look' is incorrect. Remove the repeated phrase, use 'would rather look at' or 'would rather look at and enjoy', and join fragments into one clear sentence. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use 'I would rather' for preferences and combine fragments into a complete sentence. Grammar problem type ID:26

× And also I don't have a nice phone so it's a bit of a hassle to take good pictures.

✓ I also don't have a good phone, so it's a bit of a hassle to take good pictures.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' and using 'nice phone' is informal; 'good phone' is more natural. The original sentence is understandable but slightly colloquial and fragmentary. Use a single sentence with proper conjunction: 'I also don't have a good phone, so it's a bit of a hassle to take good pictures.' This fixes sentence flow and word choice. Grammar problem type ID:16

× I prefer views in urban areas because.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because the city lights and architecture are interesting at night.

The original ends with 'because.' creating a sentence fragment; a reason must follow 'because.' Provide a complete clause to explain preference. Keep tense present to match question context. Grammar problem type ID:23

× The scenery in the night is breathtaking with all the glitters and glamorous views.

✓ The scenery at night is breathtaking with all the glittering lights and glamorous views.

Use the preposition 'at night' rather than 'in the night.' 'Glitters' (noun/verb) is awkward; 'glittering lights' or 'glitter' is better. 'Glittering' is a present participle describing lights. Also pluralization 'glitters' is uncommon here. Change to 'glittering lights' to convey shining elements. This fixes preposition and adjective/participle usage. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I prefer views in my own country rather than other countries.

✓ I prefer views in my own country rather than in other countries.

When comparing locations, include the preposition 'in' before 'other countries' for parallel structure: 'in my own country' vs 'in other countries.' This corrects a preposition omission and improves clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11

× This is because I was born and raised in Japan and I love the seasons flow.

✓ This is because I was born and raised in Japan, and I love the changing seasons.

'The seasons flow' is unnatural in English. Use 'changing seasons' or 'the seasons' to express variation. Also add a comma before 'and' for two independent clauses. Maintain present tense 'love' for a general truth. This corrects word choice and improves naturalness. Grammar problem type ID:13