视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant words (e.g., "literally," repeated phrases) and unnatural adjectives ("ecstatic" sounds extreme for this context).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph nearby parks and buildings because I like capturing changing light and seasonal colors. Also, I sometimes take photos to preserve memories from trips and family outings.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, reduce hesitation and repetition, and add a specific reason with an example connected by a linking phrase (e.g., "because," "for example"). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "countryside," "landscapes").

示例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural landscapes. For example, I love photographing rolling fields and wildflowers, as they offer peaceful scenes and interesting textures that are hard to find in cities.

建议: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases. State your preference clearly, give a specific reason and an illustrative example using linking words like "because" and "for instance." Reduce hesitations and repeated words.

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because they remind me of childhood memories. For instance, seeing old streets and countryside hills makes me feel nostalgic and inspires me to photograph familiar places during family visits.

× I'm a very ecstatic person, so yes, I do like to take a lot of pictures of literally everything I see around.

✓ I'm a very enthusiastic person, so yes, I do like to take a lot of pictures of practically everything I see around.

The adjective 'ecstatic' describes extreme, often short-lived emotion and is not appropriate to describe a general habit or personality; 'enthusiastic' fits better. Also, 'literally' is frequently misused as an intensifier and should be replaced by 'practically' or 'virtually' to mean 'almost everything.' Suggestion: choose adjectives that match the intended meaning and avoid colloquial misuse of 'literally.'

× Maybe it's small, it's big, it's cute, or even it's ugly.

✓ Maybe it's small, big, cute, or even ugly.

Repeating 'it's' before each adjective is unnecessary and makes the sentence wordy. Using a parallel list of adjectives without repeating the subject is more natural. Suggestion: use parallel structure when listing adjectives.

× Sometimes I take pictures to just keep the memories for it.

✓ Sometimes I take pictures just to keep the memories of them.

The original phrase 'keep the memories for it' is ungrammatical. 'Memories' take a preposition 'of' to indicate what the memories are about, and the pronoun should agree with 'pictures' (them). Also, 'just to' is the natural order for the infinitive phrase. Suggestion: use 'memories of them' or 'memories of it/them' with correct pronoun agreement.

× I usually prefer to view uh, views in the rural areas because we see, we see a lot of natural stuff in rural areas like flowers, a lot of nature in it.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because we see a lot of natural things there, like flowers and other aspects of nature.

Use of definite article 'the' before 'rural areas' is unnecessary in general statements; also 'natural stuff' is informal and vague. The phrase 'in it' is incorrect; use 'there' to refer back to 'rural areas.' Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use specific nouns (things) and 'there' for place reference.

× So capturing nature is one of the things I adore, I can say.

✓ So I can say that capturing nature is one of the things I adore.

The original word order is awkward. Placing 'I can say' before the clause or embedding it as 'I can say that...' makes the sentence clearer and more grammatical. Suggestion: maintain natural English word order and use 'that' to introduce reported content.

× That's a bit hard question because every country has different views and different like personal feelings.

✓ That's a bit of a hard question because every country has different views and different personal feelings.

Missing article 'a' after 'bit of' and awkward insertion of 'like' make the sentence ungrammatical. Remove filler 'like' and add 'a' to form the idiom 'a bit of a hard question.' Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions and avoid filler words.

× Uh, for me, I really like the views of my own country.

✓ For me, I really like the views in my own country.

Saying 'views of my own country' is understandable but 'views in my own country' is a more natural collocation when talking about scenery. Tense is fine; this is a word choice improvement. Suggestion: prefer common prepositional collocations like 'views in'.

× Uh, since childhood I've seen it, I've felt it whenever I see old pictures, I often feel, feel nostalgia about our old memories.

✓ Since childhood I've seen and felt it; whenever I see old pictures I often feel nostalgia about our past memories.

Mixing tenses and repeating verbs makes the sentence awkward. 'Since childhood I've seen and felt it' uses present perfect correctly for past-to-present experiences. 'Whenever I see old pictures I often feel nostalgia' keeps present tense for habitual action. 'Old memories' is redundant; 'past memories' or simply 'memories' is better. Suggestion: combine related clauses, use consistent tense, and avoid redundancy.