视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific reasons or a short example. Link ideas with a simple connector.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they capture memorable moments. For example, when I visit a mountain viewpoint I take photos of the sunrise to remember the colours and atmosphere.

建议: Correct vocabulary and sentence structure, be specific and consistent. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid confusing place names. Provide one clear reason and a brief supporting detail or example.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing. For example, near my hometown of Shimla I enjoy hiking in the forest and looking at mountain scenery, which helps me unwind.

建议: Make your point clearly and avoid repetition. Start with a direct statement (I prefer...), give one or two specific reasons and an example. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and use cohesive devices (however, also).

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I loved the coastal scenery in Australia, especially the clear beaches and cliffs; however, my country also has beautiful places like national parks.

× Yes, I usually taking pictures when the views wonder and the amazing and the beautiful.

✓ Yes, I usually take pictures when the views are wonderful and beautiful.

The verb 'taking' should be the base form 'take' after the adverb 'usually' (rule: use simple present for habitual actions). Also 'wonder' is incorrect; use the adjective 'wonderful'. Added 'are' to link subject and adjectives (copular verb). Improve by saying: 'I usually take pictures of wonderful, beautiful views.'

× Yes, I usually taking pictures when the views wonder and the amazing and the beautiful.

✓ Yes, I usually take pictures when the views are wonderful and beautiful.

The student used nouns/adjectives incorrectly: 'wonder' is a noun/verb not an adjective here, and 'the amazing and the beautiful' is ungrammatical. Use adjectives 'wonderful' and 'beautiful' and a linking verb 'are' to describe 'views.'

× And it is very interesting to take pictures.

✓ And it is very interesting to take pictures.

This sentence is grammatically correct but slightly repetitive. For variety, say: 'I find it very interesting to take pictures.' That uses present simple with verb 'find' to express opinion.

× I generally favour rural areas because they are quieter and the sanitary of its scenes with the mountains and the forest that helps me relax.

✓ I generally favour rural areas because they are quieter and the scenery with mountains and forests helps me relax.

Incorrect prepositions and word choice: 'the sanitary of its scenes' is wrong. Use 'the scenery' (uncountable noun) and remove unnecessary possessive 'its.' Use plural 'forests' to match meaning. 'Helps' agrees with singular 'scenery.'

× For example, I live near Shimla where there are both urban and rural areas, but I prefer in Uruguay since the air is clear and the natural landscapes offer the peaceful escape of lights.

✓ For example, I live near Shimla where there are both urban and rural areas, but I prefer Uruguay because the air is clear and the natural landscapes offer a peaceful escape from city lights.

Preposition 'in' is incorrect after 'prefer'; use direct object 'prefer Uruguay.' 'Offer the peaceful escape of lights' is awkward; use 'a peaceful escape from city lights.' Also use 'because' for reason. This corrects preposition and awkward noun phrase.

× Being a travel buff I travel a lot but there are some views I visit in Australia, they're the seas and are very beautiful.

✓ Being a travel buff, I travel a lot. Some views I have seen in Australia are the seascapes, and they are very beautiful.

Run-on sentence and incorrect phrasing: 'there are some views I visit in Australia' should be 'I have seen some views in Australia' or 'some views I saw.' 'They're the seas' is awkward; use 'seascapes' or 'the sea' and make verb agreement plural. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× The views are very amazing.

✓ The views are amazing.

'Very amazing' is redundant; 'amazing' alone is sufficient. If emphasis is needed, use 'truly amazing' or 'absolutely amazing.' Keep present simple to describe general fact.

× But in our country there are also some news but I prefer outside the country is there are very beautiful.

✓ But in our country there are also some beautiful views, though I prefer those abroad because they are very beautiful.

This sentence has multiple structural and word-choice errors: 'some news' is incorrect for 'views'; 'I prefer outside the country is there are very beautiful' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'I prefer those abroad' and provide a reason clause 'because they are very beautiful.' Ensure parallel structure and correct word order.