视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "very great" and repeating "scenery"), and add a specific detail or short example using a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I love photographing different views because it helps me remember beautiful places. For example, when I travel to other cities, I often take shots of unique landmarks or streetscapes so I can compare them with scenes from my hometown.

建议: Clarify the subject and correct mistakes ("bees" seems wrong). Give a direct topic sentence (state no preference or a preference) and support it with a reason using a linking word like "because" or "however." Avoid unclear pronouns.

示例: I don't really have a preference between urban and rural views because I enjoy photographing anything that looks interesting. For example, whether it's a busy city street or a quiet countryside field, I focus on composition and light to capture appealing images.

建议: Answer directly and avoid hesitation. Use one clear sentence to state your stance (no preference) and add a specific reason or example with a linking word such as "because" or "for example." Remove filler words like "uh" and repeated phrases.

示例: I don't have a strong preference because every country offers unique scenery. For instance, I enjoy the familiar architecture at home and also love photographing coastal landscapes when I travel abroad.

× I love taking pictures of different views because it is a very great way for me to memorize this beautiful scenery.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views because it is a great way for me to remember this beautiful scenery.

'Very great' is an awkward and redundant modifier; 'great' alone is sufficient. Also 'memorize' is used for learning facts and sounds odd for scenes; 'remember' is more natural for recalling experiences. Use of adjective/adverb needs adjusting for natural collocation.

× when I have a tour in different cities, I prefer to take pictures of these special scenery for me compared with the pictures in my city.

✓ when I travel to different cities, I prefer to take pictures of scenery that is special to me compared with the pictures from my city.

'Have a tour in' is non-idiomatic; use 'travel to' or 'tour'. 'These special scenery' is incorrect: 'scenery' is uncountable so 'these' is wrong; use 'scenery that is special to me' or 'special scenery'. Preposition 'in my city' should be 'from my city' to show comparison of source.

× Only I don't care about whether the bees are in urban or rural areas, I just want to take pictures of them and preserve them for the future appreciation.

✓ I don't care whether the views are in urban or rural areas; I just want to take pictures of them and preserve them for future appreciation.

Sentence had several issues: 'Only' at the start is unnecessary and causes awkwardness. The student wrote 'bees' likely meaning 'views'—wrong word choice (noted but primary fix is subject). 'the future appreciation' should be 'future appreciation' without definite article. Also 'preserve them for future appreciation' is more natural. Ensure subject and verb agree: 'views are' is correct.

× I just want to take pictures of them and preserve them for the future appreciation.

✓ I just want to take pictures of them and preserve them for future appreciation.

The definite article 'the' before 'future appreciation' is unnecessary. Use 'for future appreciation' for natural phrasing. This is a preposition/article collocation correction.

× Actually, I believe that in different places there are different views people can enjoy.

✓ Actually, I believe that in different places there are different views that people can enjoy.

The original sentence is mostly correct but missing the relative pronoun 'that' for clarity. This is a present-tense statement; adding 'that' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× So I don't mind, uh, I don't mind the weather the views are in my country or in other countries.

✓ So I don't mind the weather where the views are, whether in my country or in other countries.

Original has defective clause order and missing connector 'where' or 'whether'. Rewriting with 'where' and 'whether' fixes conjunction/connector use and clarifies meaning.

× And uh, I, I do not have the evaluation on this, of these.

✓ And I do not have an opinion on this.

'I do not have the evaluation on this, of these' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'opinion' instead of 'evaluation' in this context. Simplifying the sentence removes repetition and corrects structure.