视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve fluency and reduce hesitation by practicing concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small word choice and pronunciation errors (e.g., 'tank' → 'taking', avoid repeating fillers like 'umm').

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph landscapes at sunrise because the sunlight makes colours more vivid, and I also like capturing urban scenes to show city life. These two types of photos let me explore both natural beauty and human activity.

建议: Be direct in your response—state a clear preference or say you like both, then give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and unfinished sentences. Practice producing one complete supporting idea at a time with concrete details (e.g., architecture, parks, quietness).

示例: I prefer rural views for their peaceful atmosphere, but I also enjoy cities for their architecture. For instance, rural areas offer quiet fields and clear skies that are relaxing, while urban parks and historic buildings provide interesting shapes and colours for photos.

建议: Provide a clear statement and then give specific comparisons. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'however' to structure the answer. Avoid repetition and finish your thought about other countries with concrete details (e.g., different landscapes, architectural styles).

示例: I like views in my own country because traditional buildings and cultural symbols feel familiar and meaningful. However, I also enjoy views in other countries because they offer different architectural styles and landscapes, such as alpine mountains or coastal towns, which inspire new photo ideas.

× Yes, I do umm, I enjoy tank taking uh, pictures of uh, umm, sceneries, beautiful sceneries because uh, I believe that like the sunlight makes everything uh, more beautiful.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of beautiful scenery because I believe sunlight makes everything more beautiful.

Errors: 'tank taking' is a mispronunciation/mistyping and should be 'taking' (verb form). 'Sceneries' is uncountable in this context; use 'scenery' (singular/uncountable) — relates to singular/plural issue (ID 1) and article errors (ID 22). Extra filler words and repeated hesitation should be removed for clarity; combine clauses properly to form complete sentences (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'The sunlight' — article not necessary; 'sunlight' is uncountable, so 'sunlight' without 'the' is acceptable here. Suggestion: remove fillers, choose correct verb forms, and use uncountable nouns like 'scenery'.

× And also when I am like in a city, I enjoy umm, photographing.

✓ Also, when I am in a city, I enjoy photographing.

Error: extra filler 'like' is unnecessary and weakens the sentence (sentence structure, ID 26). 'Photographing' is acceptable as a gerund here (ID 8), but remove hesitation. Article use is fine. Suggestion: remove filler words and hesitations to make the sentence fluent and grammatical.

× Uh, so I believe umm, there are some advantages and uh, some aspects of beauty in both of them.

✓ I believe there are advantages and aspects of beauty in both.

'There are' is fine (ID 3) but 'in both of them' is wordy; use 'in both' for conciseness. No plural error, but remove fillers and redundant words (sentence structure, ID 26). Suggestion: streamline the phrase to sound natural.

× Umm, like in the urban areas, umm, the, the nature delights, delight and also umm, the. The fresh air is so.

✓ In urban areas, nature is delightful, and the air feels fresh.

Errors: 'the urban areas' can be 'urban areas' (article errors ID 22). 'the nature delights, delight' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'nature is delightful' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27 and verb form ID 6/8). Fragment 'The fresh air is so.' is incomplete (sentence structure, ID 26). Suggestion: use a clear subject and verb, avoid repetitions, and complete the second clause with an adjective like 'fresh'.

× So I believe there are some advantages in uh, both of them.

✓ I believe there are advantages to both.

'Both of them' is informal and wordy; 'advantages to both' is more natural. 'Some advantages' is grammatically acceptable but can be streamlined. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and avoid unnecessary fillers.

× Umm, So in, in my country, there are some traditional, umm, building and there are some cultural, uh, symbols that I like.

✓ In my country, there are some traditional buildings and cultural symbols that I like.

Errors: 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'some' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). Remove repeated 'in, in' and filler words (sentence structure, ID 26). 'Some cultural symbols' is fine once cleaned. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches quantifier 'some' and remove hesitations.

× I, I, I, I like them, but in other countries there are.

✓ I like them, but other countries also have interesting sights.

Original ends with incomplete clause 'there are' (There be issue/ sentence fragment, ID 3 and 26). Repeat 'I' is hesitation; remove it. Suggestion: complete the contrast by specifying what 'there are' refers to, for example 'interesting sights' or 'other attractions'.