视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one specific detail with a linking word. Keep it under 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photography and often take pictures at events or when I travel to preserve memories. For example, last year I photographed a city festival to capture the atmosphere and candid moments.

建议: Give a clear preference or balanced view with linking words and correct grammar; avoid repeating phrases and correct noun-verb agreement. Provide a specific contrasting detail.

示例: It depends on my mood: generally I prefer rural views for the fresh air and quiet, but I also enjoy cities because they offer interesting architecture and convenient facilities. For instance, I like walking in the countryside to relax, whereas in the city I photograph modern buildings.

建议: Structure the answer: state a clear position, then support with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Remove redundant phrases and ensure natural vocabulary.

示例: I appreciate both, but if I must choose I prefer exploring other countries because they offer new cultures and landscapes. For example, since I moved to the UK I’ve enjoyed photographing historic architecture and meeting friendly locals, which inspires my photography.

× I love taking picture of everything.

✓ I love taking pictures of everything.

The noun 'picture' should be plural after 'taking' when referring to many items. Use the gerund 'taking' with the plural noun 'pictures' to indicate repeated action. Suggestion: say 'taking pictures' when you photograph many things.

× Whenever I look good, I take picture or I take picture in every event and uh, I am, I love photography and uh, whenever I travel, I take a lot of photos to preserve memories.

✓ Whenever I look good, I take pictures, and I take pictures at every event. I love photography, and whenever I travel I take a lot of photos to preserve memories.

Multiple issues: 'take picture' should be 'take pictures' (plural after the gerund). Use 'at' for events, not 'in'. Remove filler words and combine clauses with appropriate conjunctions. Maintain consistent tense and parallel structure.

× It depends on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. Included for completeness: pronoun use here is appropriate.

× I love country view, sometimes I love city view.

✓ I love the countryside view; sometimes I love the city view.

Use definite article 'the' with specific views and 'countryside' rather than 'country' to describe rural scenery. 'City view' also takes 'the' when speaking generally about that type of scenery.

× I love the fresh air of countryside.

✓ I love the fresh air of the countryside.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'countryside' when referring to a general rural environment. 'of the countryside' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Also the people is very humble towards each other.

✓ Also, the people are very humble towards each other.

'People' is a plural noun, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Add a comma after 'Also' for clarity.

× Also I love city view because the facilities and everything in the city I really loved.

✓ Also, I love the city view because of the facilities and everything in the city; I really love them.

Use 'the city view' with 'the'. 'Loved' is past tense but the rest is present preference; use present tense 'love'. 'Facilities and everything' is plural so refer with 'them'. Include 'because of' to link reason.

× Honestly I love both, I love my own country, it's my motherland, I have a soft corner for the country.

✓ Honestly, I love both. I love my own country; it's my motherland, and I have a soft spot for it.

'Soft corner' is nonstandard; use 'soft spot'. Avoid repeating 'country' by using the pronoun 'it'. Use punctuation to separate ideas and maintain clarity.

× Also I love to explore different cities and the people I really like.

✓ Also, I love to explore different cities, and I really like the people.

Sentence structure is awkward. Separate clauses and place 'really' before the verb phrase 'like the people' for natural word order.

× And now currently I am in the UK.

✓ I am currently in the UK.

Both 'now' and 'currently' are redundant; use one. Place adverb 'currently' after the verb 'am' for natural word order.

× I love the scenery, the view of everything in the country and also the people is very humble and good.

✓ I love the scenery and the views in the country, and the people are very humble and kind.

'People' requires plural verb 'are'. Use 'views' plural or rephrase to 'the views in the country'. 'Good' describing people is vague; 'kind' is more natural. Use parallel structure when listing items.