视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on clarity, correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verbs and nouns, and avoid unnecessary words. For example, say you like taking pictures and why, then give one brief detail. Use linking words if needed.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I like capturing moments. For example, I save them on my phone so I can look back at the scenery anytime and remember where I was.

建议: Correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give specific reasons using clear linking words (because, for example). Replace wrong words (e.g., "pizza" and "on them") and be concise.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural scenes. For example, I like trees, flowers and butterflies, so I take photos to capture the peaceful atmosphere.

建议: Improve coherence and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating preference (own country or abroad). Give one or two specific reasons and a result, using linking words (when, so, therefore). Avoid repetition and unfinished clauses.

示例: I prefer taking photos of views in other countries because when I travel I want to record my memories. So, I take photos to remember the places and to share them with friends when I return.

× Yes, I light because I want to wake up the fields in my mobile phone and I can look at them in anytime, anywhere after that.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos because I want to save pictures of scenes on my mobile phone so I can look at them anytime, anywhere later.

Errors: 'light' is a wrong word for 'like' (incorrect word choice), 'wake up the fields' is meaningless here and should be 'save pictures of scenes' (sentence structure/word choice), 'in my mobile phone' should be 'on my mobile phone' (preposition error), and 'in anytime' is incorrect—use 'anytime' or 'at any time' (adverb/preposition misuse). Suggestion: Use 'like' for preference, 'save pictures' or 'take photos' for preserving images, use 'on' with devices, and use 'anytime' or 'at any time'. Suggested grammar_problem_type_id:11

× I pizza fields in rural areas because I like nature such as tree flowers and some animals such as butterflies, so I would like to take the photo on them.

✓ I prefer fields in rural areas because I like nature, such as trees, flowers, and animals like butterflies, so I would like to take photos of them.

Errors: 'pizza' is a wrong word for 'prefer' (incorrect word choice), 'tree' should be plural 'trees' (singular/plural), 'take the photo on them' is incorrect—use 'take photos of them' (preposition and noun number). Suggestion: Use 'prefer' for choice, pluralize countable nouns appropriately, and use 'take photos of' to indicate photographing subjects. Suggested grammar_problem_type_id:1

× I prefer fields in my sorry in other countries because when I go there to travel I want to record and keep the memory and so if I take the photographic on them I can I when I come back to my.

✓ I prefer fields in other countries because when I travel there I want to record and keep memories, so if I take photographs of them I can look at them when I come back home.

Errors: 'in my sorry in other countries' is unclear—should be 'in other countries' (pronoun/word choice). 'Record and keep the memory' should be 'record and keep memories' (article and number). 'Take the photographic on them' is incorrect; use 'take photographs of them' (word form and preposition). 'I can I when I come back to my' is ungrammatical—should be 'I can look at them when I come back home' (sentence structure and missing verb). Suggestion: Use clear pronouns ('other countries'), plural 'memories', 'photographs of', and complete clauses with appropriate verbs like 'look at'. Suggested grammar_problem_type_id:12