视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve fluency and clarity: avoid hesitation and repetition, answer directly, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use clear linking and correct grammar (e.g., talk about what you photograph and why).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes because I appreciate natural light and wide open spaces, so I often visit parks and coastlines to capture sunrise and sunset scenes.

建议: Give a direct opinion first and then support it with a clear reason and example. Avoid vague phrasing and incorrect words. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'however' to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer rural views because I find the countryside more peaceful and visually interesting. For example, I like photographing fields and old farmhouses where there are fewer people and more natural textures.

建议: Answer the question directly (state a clear preference or say both), then give a specific reason and a short example. Use correct tense and simpler sentence structure to avoid confusion.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because travelling gives me the chance to see different cultures and landscapes. For instance, when I studied abroad I photographed historic city streets and mountain scenery that I can't find at home.

× Yes, I like, like, uh, taking pictures and listen to you because I have a lot of information how to, uh, create different kind of parts in unique place.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures and listening to them because I have a lot of information about how to create different kinds of parts in unique places.

Issues: (1) Incorrect verb form after 'and' — parallel structure requires gerund 'listening' instead of 'listen' (matches Grammar Problem Type 8: Verb + -ing form). (2) 'Listen to you' is contextually wrong if referring to pictures; changed to 'listening to them'. (3) Missing preposition 'about' before a clause explaining information (Grammar Problem Type 11). (4) 'Different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds' and 'parts' likely needs plural agreement (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). (5) 'Unique place' should be plural 'unique places' to match 'different kinds'. Suggestion: maintain parallel gerunds after 'and', use correct prepositions ('information about'), and ensure noun number agreement ('different kinds', 'unique places').

× Although there are several places available in my nation like urban area as well as rural area, some of the individual explores that kind of places and they take different kind of pictures with their needs and ears one.

✓ Although there are several places in my country, both urban and rural areas, some individuals explore those kinds of places and take different kinds of pictures to suit their needs.

Issues: (1) 'Available' is unnecessary after 'places' and unnatural here; removed. (2) 'My nation' is better stated as 'my country' (style). (3) 'Urban area as well as rural area' should be 'both urban and rural areas' for correct parallel structure (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors). (4) 'Some of the individual' should be 'some individuals' (Grammar Problem Type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns/Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). (5) 'Explores' should be 'explore' to agree with plural subject 'individuals' (Grammar Problem Type 27: Subject-verb agreement). (6) 'That kind of places' should be 'those kinds of places' (plural demonstrative and plural noun) (Grammar Problem Type 1). (7) 'Different kind of pictures' should be 'different kinds of pictures' (Grammar Problem Type 1). (8) 'With their needs and ears one' is unclear; corrected to 'to suit their needs'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement, use correct plural forms and demonstratives, and choose clear prepositions/phrases ('suit their needs').

× I live in our own country, but I have completed my graduation. I go to abroad for my father's study. After that I took I explored the, uh, the view in other country in future.

✓ I live in my country, and I have completed my graduation. I went abroad for my father's studies, and after that I explored the views in other countries.

Issues: (1) 'Our own country' is inconsistent with 'I' — use 'my country' (Grammar Problem Type 12). (2) 'I have completed my graduation' is awkward but grammatically acceptable; kept as 'I have completed my graduation'. (3) 'I go to abroad' is incorrect; use past tense 'I went abroad' and omit 'to' before 'abroad' (Grammar Problem Type 7: Future tense issue changed to Past tense issue and Grammar Problem Type 5: Past tense issue). (4) 'For my father's study' should be 'for my father's studies' (plural and preposition) (Grammar Problem Type 11 and 14). (5) 'After that I took I explored the, uh, the view in other country in future' has multiple errors: redundant verbs 'took I explored', incorrect tense 'in future' inconsistent with 'after that', and 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' or 'another country' (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors; Grammar Problem Type 1). Suggestion: use consistent tense (past tense for completed actions), correct verb order (single verb per clause), and accurate prepositions and noun forms ('went abroad', 'father's studies', 'views in other countries').