视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetitions and filler words (e.g., "so", "basically"). Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. As a professional photographer, I focus on capturing decisive moments from varied angles to highlight the scene’s mood and composition.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and vague phrases like "you can do everything." Provide concrete examples (e.g., architecture, street life).

示例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse subjects such as striking architecture and lively street scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing cafés, markets and illuminated skyscrapers, which provide dynamic compositions and storytelling opportunities.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a specific example. Avoid uncertainty and fillers. Use linking words to clarify contrast between home and abroad.

示例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes that I don’t see at home. For instance, traveling lets me capture unique architecture and local customs that add variety to my portfolio.

× Yeah, I'm a photographer, professional photographer.

✓ Yeah, I'm a photographer, a professional photographer.

The sentence omits the article 'a' before the noun phrase 'professional photographer'. In English, singular countable nouns generally require an article or determiner. Add 'a' to make the phrase grammatically correct and natural.'

× So basically I try to catch the best moment at different angles of that place where I'm taking the view.

✓ So basically I try to capture the best moments from different angles of the place where I am photographing the view.

Several issues: 'try to catch' is awkward for photography; 'capture' is a more appropriate verb. 'Moment' should be plural 'moments' to match 'different angles' (plural/sense). 'Taking the view' is incorrect; use 'photographing the view' or 'taking photos of the view'. Also use continuous present 'I am photographing' to match the ongoing action. Replace 'at different angles of that place' with 'from different angles of the place' for correct preposition use.'

× To be honest, I prefer, uh, urban areas so because I love, you know, city, so you can get anything you wanted.

✓ To be honest, I prefer urban areas because I love the city; you can get anything you want there.

Multiple problems: redundant conjunctions 'so because' should be simplified to 'because'. 'Love, you know, city' needs article 'the' before 'city'. 'You wanted' mixes tenses; use present tense 'you want' to state a general truth. Also add 'there' to clarify location. Remove filler commas and 'so' to improve clarity.'

× So you can do any activities there.

✓ So you can do any activities there.

The sentence is acceptable but could be improved stylistically; however it does not present a clear grammatical error under the provided list. Keep as is or use 'do any activity' or 'do many activities' for naturalness. No correction required.'

× Uh, you can find like people, so you can do everything in general.

✓ You can find people there, so you can do almost anything in general.

'Find like people' is ungrammatical: 'like' is filler here and should be removed. Add 'there' to indicate location. 'Do everything' is an overstatement and unnatural; 'do almost anything' is a more natural collocation. The revision fixes preposition/location and word choice.'

× I guess my country is good enough, but I prefer other countries, uh, rather than mine.

✓ I guess my country is good enough, but I prefer other countries rather than mine.

Sentence is mostly grammatical but word order 'prefer other countries rather than mine' is acceptable; better phrasing is 'I prefer other countries to mine'. The problem relates to comparative construction and pronoun reference. Changing to 'prefer other countries to mine' follows standard English preference structure.'

× Uh, basically, uh, you can get a different kind of views whether.

✓ Basically, you can get different kinds of views elsewhere.

'A different kind of views' mixes singular and plural: use 'different kinds of views' or 'a different kind of view'. The trailing 'whether' is incorrect and likely a fragment of 'whether you...' Removing it and using 'elsewhere' clarifies meaning. This fixes plural consistency and removes incorrect conjunction/word.'