视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và cấu trúc câu; trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn; tránh từ thừa và nói lặp; sử dụng 1-2 câu bổ sung cụ thể với liên từ phù hợp. Ví dụ: nêu rõ khi nào bạn chụp, chụp gì và vì sao.

示例: I don't really enjoy taking photos in general. However, sometimes I take pictures of film posters and scenes because they remind me of a favorite movie and help me remember interesting details.

建议: Sửa lỗi từ vựng sai (foods, speakers) và ngữ pháp; trả lời trực tiếp (urban/rural) rồi giải thích với chi tiết cụ thể; dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'for example' để kết nối ý. Hạn chế câu mơ hồ, dùng từ đúng (skyscrapers, scenes).

示例: I prefer urban views because I live in the city and enjoy the energy there. For example, I like photographing skyscrapers and busy streets since the crowds and fast pace make the scenes dynamic.

建议: Giảm tiếng lắp (umm, uh) và nói mạch lạc; cấu trúc câu rõ ràng: khẳng định, giải thích và đưa ví dụ cụ thể; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (my village → my country/region; it's is → it is) và dùng từ chính xác (coastal area, landmarks). Viết 2-3 câu rõ ràng nêu lý do yêu thích cảnh trong nước và dẫn ví dụ cụ thể như Hạ Long Bay.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has many diverse landscapes from south to north. For example, Ha Long Bay is a stunning coastal area that attracts many visitors, and I enjoy photographing its limestone islands to share my love for my country.

× I'm not kind of person who really likes to take pictures.

✓ I'm not the kind of person who really likes to take pictures.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'kind of person'. Use 'the kind of person' to refer to a specific type. In Vietnamese: Câu thiếu mạo từ xác định 'the' trước 'kind of person'. Nên nói 'the kind of person' để chỉ một loại người cụ thể.

× Sometime I take some pictures of films and I really like to take many different of that as taking pictures about those make me a can help me to. Note down that time.

✓ Sometimes I take pictures of films, and I really like taking many different ones because taking those pictures can help me remember that time.

Multiple issues: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'take some pictures of films' is okay but 'many different of that' is incorrect; use 'many different ones' to refer to pictures. 'as taking pictures about those make me a can help me to' is ungrammatical; express purpose/result with 'because ... can help me remember that time'. In Vietnamese: Nhiều lỗi: 'Sometime' phải là 'Sometimes'; cần dùng 'many different ones' để thay thế; câu cuối phải viết lại để rõ nghĩa, ví dụ '... because taking those pictures can help me remember that time.'

× I live in the city so I prefer the foods in urban areas.

✓ I live in the city, so I prefer the views in urban areas.

The student likely meant 'views' not 'foods' given context. 'the foods' is incorrect here. Replace with 'the views'. In Vietnamese: Từ 'foods' không phù hợp với ngữ cảnh; nên dùng 'views'.

× I like to take speakers while them skyscraper or the view of many people going to work on the fast pace of life.

✓ I like to take photos of skyscrapers or the view of many people hurrying to work in the fast pace of city life.

Many errors: 'take speakers' is wrong — 'take photos' or 'photograph'. 'while them skyscraper' should be 'of skyscrapers'. 'going to work on the fast pace of life' should be 'hurrying to work in the fast pace of city life'. In Vietnamese: Cần dùng 'take photos' hoặc 'photograph', 'skyscraper' phải ở số nhiều nếu nói chung, và cụm 'in the fast pace of city life' là cách diễn đạt đúng.

× Of course, I live in Vietnam, so I prefer my village in my country and my country, there are lots of scenic views, umm, go through the South to the north.

✓ Of course, I live in Vietnam, so I prefer the scenery in my country; there are lots of scenic views from the south to the north.

Sentence is redundant and ungrammatical. 'I prefer my village in my country and my country' is repetitive. Use 'prefer the scenery in my country' and 'from the south to the north' for direction. In Vietnamese: Câu lập lại và ngữ pháp sai; nên gộp ý và dùng 'scenery' và 'from the south to the north'.

× Uh, for example, Halong Bay, you can see that it's is a very beautiful beach which attracts many foreigners to come to.

✓ For example, Ha Long Bay is a very beautiful place that attracts many foreigners to visit.

Problems: 'it's is' is double verb — choose 'it is' or 'it's'. 'beach' may be inaccurate; 'place' or 'bay' is better. 'attracts many foreigners to come to' is wordy; say 'attracts many foreigners to visit'. In Vietnamese: Có lỗi 'it's is', nên chỉ dùng 'is' hoặc 'it's'; 'beach' có thể không phù hợp, tốt hơn là 'place' hoặc 'bay'; dùng 'attracts many foreigners to visit' để gọn hơn.

× Although also uh, prefer views in my country is the way for me to umm, to uh, spread my love country.

✓ Also, preferring views in my country is a way for me to express my love for my country.

Grammatical and word order issues: 'Although also' is unnecessary; 'prefer views in my country is the way for me to ... spread my love country' should be 'preferring views in my country is a way for me to express my love for my country.' Use 'express' and 'love for my country'. In Vietnamese: Cần thay 'Although also' bằng 'Also' hoặc loại bỏ, dùng 'preferring' hoặc 'to prefer' và cụm 'express my love for my country'.