视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문법과 자연스러운 표현을 다듬어야 합니다. 주어-동사 일치 오류("it's make" → "it helps me" 또는 "it makes me"), 불필요한 단어 제거, 문장을 명확하게 구성하세요. 또한 추가적으로 왜 다양한 관점이 흥미로운지 구체적인 이유(감정이나 목적)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이면 더 풍부한 답변이 됩니다. 답변은 최대 5문장으로 유지하세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me see familiar places from new perspectives. For example, a rooftop shot can reveal patterns and colors you don’t notice at street level, which makes photography very rewarding.

建议: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 'urban view' 대신 'urban areas' 또는 'city views'가 자연스럽습니다. 연결어를 사용해 이유를 명확히 하고, 불필요한 표현('the view of earth from city')을 구체적이고 정확한 표현으로 바꾸세요. 예시나 비교(예: skyscrapers vs. open fields)를 한두 문장으로 추가하면 설득력이 높아집니다.

示例: I prefer city views because tall buildings and busy streets feel more impressive to me. Since I grew up in the city, I'm more familiar with its atmosphere, and I enjoy photographing architectural details and the lively crowd.

建议: 내용의 사실관계와 표현을 바로잡아야 합니다. 문법적으로도 여러 오류가 있습니다('cause Kongju' 의미 불분명, 'Guangzhou'와 'Korean' 연결 오류). 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 이유를 분명히 제시하세요. 특정 도시나 건축물을 예로 들 때는 정확한 이름과 특성을 사용하고, 말 더듬거나 망설임('umm')은 피하세요.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I'm more connected to the culture and architecture. For example, in my hometown there are many traditional buildings and markets that reflect local history, which I find more interesting to photograph than places abroad.

× Yes, I do like it because it's make me discover how it looks in different perspectives.

✓ Yes, I do like it because it makes me discover how it looks from different perspectives.

The verb 'make' must be conjugated to agree with the singular subject 'it' (third person singular), so use 'makes'. Also 'in different perspectives' is not idiomatic; use 'from different perspectives' to show different viewpoints. Suggestion: use 'it makes me discover' and 'from different perspectives.'

× I prefer urban view because the height of the buildings and the crowded people are more impressive to me, and as I grow up in the city, the view of earth from city is more familiar.

✓ I prefer urban views because the heights of the buildings and the crowds of people are more impressive to me, and since I grew up in the city, the view of the city from above is more familiar.

Use plural 'views' for general preference (quantifier/noun number). 'Height' should be plural when referring to multiple buildings: 'heights'. 'Crowded people' is awkward; use 'crowds of people'. 'As I grow up' is wrong tense for a past condition—use 'since I grew up'. 'the view of earth from city' is ungrammatical; clarify as 'the view of the city from above'. Suggestions: use plurals for general statements, use 'since I grew up' for past background, and choose clearer phrasing like 'view of the city from above.'

× I do prefer the view in our country especially the city that cause Kongju because Guangzhou has umm traditional Korean building in whole city.

✓ I do prefer the views in our country, especially the city called Gongju, because Guangzhou has traditional Korean-style buildings throughout the city.

Pronoun/word choice problems and proper nouns: 'the city that cause Kongju' is incorrect; likely meant 'the city called Gongju.' 'Umm' is filler and should be removed. 'Traditional Korean building in whole city' needs plural and preposition: 'traditional Korean-style buildings throughout the city.' Suggestions: use correct place names, remove fillers, and use plural nouns with 'throughout' to indicate distribution.