视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak more fluently and reduce hesitation (fillers like "uh", "umm"). Start with a clear topic sentence, briefly expand with one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repeating the same idea. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use "landscapes", "scenery", "photography") and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially landscapes. I focus on nature photography and often post my best shots on Instagram, where I have many followers. They expect new pictures regularly, so I try to capture interesting lighting and composition to keep my feed fresh.

建议: Provide a direct topic sentence and one or two clear reasons with specific examples; eliminate filler words and repetition. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also") to make the answer coherent. Explain what you like about rural views (e.g., quietness, landscapes, wildlife) to add specificity.

示例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a village and enjoy the greenery and peaceful atmosphere. For example, I like photographing fields, forests and rivers where I can capture wildlife and natural light without the distractions of traffic and buildings.

建议: Avoid broad negative generalizations about your country; be diplomatic. Clearly state your preference and give specific, balanced reasons and an example. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for instance", "however") and varied vocabulary (e.g., "maintenance", "green spaces"). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

示例: I usually prefer views in other countries because public parks and coastal areas abroad are often better maintained. For instance, I find Australia's parks very well kept and rich in greenery, which makes them great for photography. However, my country also has beautiful natural spots, even if they are less developed in some areas.

× Well, since I was brought in a village, I prefer views in in a rural area, umm, because the reason for that is that, uh, there is a lot of greenery and a lot of umm, natural beauty. Umm, so.

✓ Well, since I was brought up in a village, I prefer views in rural areas, because there is a lot of greenery and natural beauty.

Use 'brought up' not 'brought' when referring to being raised. Use 'in a village' or 'in villages' with correct article; here 'in a village' is OK for singular but context fits 'in rural areas' plural. Remove duplicate 'in'. Use 'rural areas' (plural) to match general preference. Remove filler words. Simplify 'because the reason for that is that' to 'because'. Suggestions: replace 'brought in' with 'brought up', remove repeated 'in', use plural 'rural areas' for general statements, simplify redundant phrases.

× I have a number of followers who look forward to me uploading those pictures.

✓ I have a number of followers who look forward to my uploading those pictures.

The phrase 'look forward to' is followed by a noun or gerund. 'Me uploading' is informal; the more grammatical form is 'my uploading' (possessive + gerund). Alternatively 'who look forward to seeing my uploads' also works. Suggestion: use 'my uploading' or rephrase to 'who look forward to my posts'.

× The reason is that Australia is much more greener and people, uh, the economy is really good.

✓ The reason is that Australia is much greener and the economy is really good.

Do not use 'much more greener' because 'greener' already expresses comparative; 'much' can modify 'greener' but not 'more greener'. Use either 'much greener' or 'more green'. Also add 'the' before 'economy' to specify Australia's economy and remove the extra 'people,' which is misplaced. Suggestion: say 'Australia is much greener and its economy is really good.'

× in my country, uh, people are poor, we don't have a good economy, umm, so people don't take care of the views a lot.

✓ In my country, many people are poor and we don't have a strong economy, so people don't take much care of the scenery.

Use 'many people' rather than 'people are poor' alone for clarity. 'We don't have a good economy' is informal; 'we don't have a strong economy' is better. 'Take care of the views a lot' is awkward; 'take much care of the scenery' or 'take good care of the environment' is clearer. Adjust capitalization at sentence start. Suggestion: replace 'views' with 'scenery' or 'the environment' and use 'take much care' or 'take good care'.

× So people do take care of the nature, uh, really well.

✓ So people do take care of nature really well.

Don't use the definite article 'the' before 'nature' when speaking generally; say 'take care of nature'. The verb 'do take' is acceptable for emphasis. Remove filler words and extra commas. Suggestion: use 'nature' without 'the' and avoid unnecessary hesitations.