视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views), then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Reduce fillers (uh, you know) and correct grammar (e.g., 'those times' -> 'when I have free time'). Also use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'sunsets' and 'relaxing'). Aim for 2–4 sentences, varying sentence openings with linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. When I have free time, I often go outside to photograph natural scenes, especially sunsets, because the colours and light are very relaxing. For example, last month I photographed the sunset by the river and the warm colours made the photos look dramatic.

建议: Provide a clear direct answer with coherent reasons and avoid vague phrases (e.g., 'you know', 'too good'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'I like taking pictures in urban areas' and 'rural areas have more natural scenes' if you mean that). Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to contrast. Be specific about what you like in urban views (architecture, city lights, street life).

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing architecture and city life. Urban areas offer interesting buildings, busy streets and colourful lights, which create dynamic photos. However, I sometimes visit parks in the countryside for quieter, natural shots.

建议: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement (e.g., 'I prefer views in my own country') and give specific reasons: mention particular landscapes, cultural scenes or landmarks. Replace vague praise ('our country is too good') with concrete examples. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it has a wide variety of landscapes and familiar cultural scenes. For example, our coastal cliffs and historic city centres offer unique photo opportunities that I know well and enjoy capturing.

× I love taking pictures, uh, different views because, uh, when I get some free time, uh, those time I like to go outside, uh, for need some natural views pictures.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views because when I get some free time I like to go outside to take pictures of natural scenery.

The original sentence misuses gerunds and infinitives and has unnecessary words. 'Taking pictures of' is correct; 'for need some natural views pictures' is ungrammatical — use the infinitive 'to take' and 'natural scenery' or 'natural views'. Remove filler words and fix word order for clarity.

× And most of the time I like sunset because it's gave me release and I taking picture on the sunset.

✓ Most of the time I like sunsets because they give me a sense of release and I take pictures of the sunset.

Mixed past and present tenses: 'it's gave' incorrectly combines present contraction with past verb. Use present 'give' to match habitual action. 'I taking picture' needs simple present 'I take pictures' and preposition 'of' not 'on'. Also pluralize 'sunset' to 'sunsets' when speaking generally.

× I prefer urban areas because of you know the outside view of urban areas are too good.

✓ I prefer urban areas because, you know, the views of urban areas are very nice.

Awkward pronoun/phrase use: 'because of you know the outside view' should be rephrased. 'Views' plural agrees with 'are'. Replace vague 'too good' with 'very nice' or 'appealing' and remove unnecessary fillers.

× So as a result I love to taking pictures on urban areas.

✓ So as a result I love taking pictures in urban areas.

Incorrect use of infinitive plus -ing: 'love to taking' should be either 'love to take' or 'love taking'. Use 'in urban areas' rather than 'on urban areas' for correct preposition.

× If you were told about rural areas because it's one cities parks, there is nothing natural.

✓ If you talk about rural areas, they have many natural features; they are not just city parks.

The original sentence structure is confused and contradictory. 'If you were told about rural areas because it's one cities parks' is incoherent. Clarify the condition and main clause, use correct subject-verb agreement and logical meaning: rural areas should be contrasted with city parks.

× I prefer all, uh, their own countries.

✓ I prefer my own country.

Confusing pronoun usage: 'their own countries' conflicts with speaker 'I'. Use first-person 'my own country' for clarity. Also 'prefer all' is unclear and unnecessary.

× I am also, I prefer my own country's views because, uh, you know, the, our countries have so many natural places and, uh, naturally, uh, our cities are too good and our, uh, uh, country is too good.

✓ I prefer the views of my own country because we have many natural places and our cities are attractive.

Redundant and incorrect articles and pronouns: mix of 'my', 'our', and 'countries' is inconsistent. Use 'the views of my own country' or 'the views in my country'. Remove repetition 'too good' and unnecessary fillers, and ensure singular/plural consistency ('country' vs 'countries').