视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more accurate with vocabulary and grammar; organize the response with one clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct words like "pictureS" and "natural scenes" (not "abuses"). Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition. Also give a specific example of a recent occasion.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing natural scenes. For example, last weekend I went to a nearby hill at sunset and took several photos of the sky and silhouette of the trees, which I later edited on my phone. I usually prefer early morning or late afternoon because the light makes landscapes look more dramatic.

建议: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison using linking words (for example, "because", "although"). Use appropriate vocabulary: 'urban' and 'rural' plus concrete details (skyscrapers, parks, open fields). Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

示例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a mix of architecture and parks that make interesting photos. For example, I like shooting city skylines at sunset because the light reflects off glass buildings and contrasts with nearby trees, whereas rural photos often focus more on wide-open fields.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitation words (uh, um) and use precise vocabulary like 'landscapes', 'coastline', or 'mountains'. Mention a concrete feature that makes your country special.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because our coastline and mountain landscapes are very scenic. For instance, the sunsets over our western beaches create vivid colors that I rarely see elsewhere, so I often spend evenings photographing the sky and shoreline.

× I love taking picture of natural abuses.

✓ I love taking pictures of natural landscapes.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'taking' (general activity). 'Natural abuses' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'natural landscapes' or 'natural scenes'. Use accurate nouns to convey meaning. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× When I get some free time, those time I'd like to go outside and I like to take a picture or video.

✓ When I get some free time, I like to go outside and take pictures or videos.

Redundant phrase 'those time' is unnecessary and incorrect; use 'When I get some free time' followed by a simple present habit 'I like to...'. Use plural 'pictures or videos' for general activities. Remove extra pronoun 'I'd' since 'I like' expresses preference. (Grammar problem type ID: 27)

× Most of the time when the sunset or start or morning time, you know, those views are too good.

✓ Most of the time, at sunset or in the morning, the views are very beautiful.

Use correct time prepositions: 'at sunset' and 'in the morning'. 'Start' is incorrect; likely 'sunrise'. 'Those views are too good' is informal and awkward; use 'the views are very beautiful'. (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× In my think if I told you the about urban areas, urban areas views are too more good because of you know most of the time if you go outside or seen some natural juices, you can take the sunsets pictures.

✓ In my opinion, urban area views are often better because you can often take pictures of sunsets and natural scenery.

Use 'In my opinion' instead of 'In my think'. Remove 'if I told you the about'. 'Urban areas views' should be 'urban area views' or 'views in urban areas'. 'Too more good' is incorrect; use 'better' or 'often better'. 'Seen some natural juices' is incorrect word choice; 'natural scenery' or 'scenic spots' is appropriate. Maintain present simple for general statements. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× You have also natural views like trees or you also look.

✓ You also have natural features like trees to look at.

Word order and article usage: 'You have also natural views' should be 'You also have natural features' or 'You can also see trees'. 'Or you also look' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'to look at' or 'to admire'. (Grammar problem type ID: 22)

× Uh yes, uh, literally I prefer my own views, uh, own countries views, uh, because of uh, if you uh look about our nature, you can see so many uh, well views and I prefer you about sunset because it's good looking, uh, literally good looking in our country.

✓ Yes, I prefer the views in my own country because when you look at our nature you can see many beautiful scenes, and I especially prefer the sunsets because they look very beautiful here.

Simplify and correct pronoun and article usage: 'my own views, own countries views' should be 'the views in my own country'. 'Look about our nature' should be 'look at our nature'. 'So many well views' is incorrect; use 'many beautiful scenes'. 'I prefer you about sunset' is wrong; express preference clearly: 'I especially prefer the sunsets'. Use consistent present simple. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)