视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct basic grammar and pronunciation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (um, uh) and correct verb forms (e.g., 'taking pictures' not 'taking picture').

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I like photographing landscapes at sunrise because the changing light and shadows create interesting moods, which makes each photo feel unique.

建议: Give a direct clear statement and one specific reason. Use correct grammar (prefer + -ing or prefer to + base verb), remove repetitions, and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: I prefer rural views because I now live in an urban area, so visiting the countryside feels fresh and different. For instance, I enjoy photographing fields and traditional houses because they offer varied textures and peaceful scenes.

建议: Be precise and avoid repetition. Give one clear preference with a specific example and a reason. Fix articles and word order (e.g., 'my country, Japan, has many great places to photograph'). Limit to max 4–5 sentences and use linking words such as 'for example' and 'because'.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because Japan has many photogenic locations. For example, Shibuya in Tokyo is busy and colorful, which makes it great for street photography, and I enjoy capturing that lively atmosphere with my camera.

× Well yes I do actually I'm not really good at taking photos, but umm, trying to taking picture different views, umm gives us new umm new feelings because it changes light or shadows.

✓ Well, yes I do. Actually, I'm not really good at taking photos, but trying to take pictures of different views gives me new feelings because the light and shadows change.

The original contains incorrect verb forms: 'trying to taking' mixes 'to' with a gerund. After 'trying to' use the base form 'take'. Also use 'take pictures' plural and 'of different views'. 'Gives us new new feelings' should be 'gives me new feelings' to match the speaker. 'Because it changes light or shadows' is unclear—use 'because the light and shadows change'. Improve punctuation and split run-on sentence for clarity.

× I would say I prefer to capturing rural areas views because I now I'm living in the rural ur urban areas so in when I go to the rural areas we can this everything is new for me and.

✓ I would say I prefer capturing views of rural areas because I am not living in urban areas now, so when I go to rural places everything is new to me.

'Prefer to capturing' is incorrect: after 'prefer' use base verb or gerund alone ('prefer capturing' or 'prefer to capture'). 'Rural areas views' should be 'views of rural areas' or 'rural views'. 'I now I'm living in the rural ur urban areas' is confused; corrected to 'I am not living in urban areas now' to match intended meaning. Remove extraneous filler and fix word order. Use 'new to me' rather than 'new for me' for natural English.

× I prefer my the views in my country, uh, my country, Japan has so many places that really good, uh, good to take picture.

✓ I prefer the views in my country. Japan has so many places that are really good for taking pictures.

The phrase 'my the views' uses conflicting articles/pronouns; use 'the views' or 'the views in my country'. 'Places that really good' lacks a verb: include 'are'. 'Good to take picture' needs 'good for taking pictures' or 'good for photography'. Fix sentence boundaries for clarity.

× For example, Shibuya is one of the biggest city in the to in Tokyo.

✓ For example, Shibuya is one of the biggest cities in Tokyo.

'One of the biggest city' mixes singular and plural; after 'one of the' the noun should be plural ('cities'). Remove extraneous words 'in the to in'. Ensure correct preposition 'in Tokyo'.

× Uh, if I take picture with newest camera, it feels good atmosphere.

✓ If I take pictures with a new camera, it creates a good atmosphere.

'Take picture' should be 'take pictures' or 'take a picture'. 'With newest camera' needs an article and adjective order: 'with the newest camera' or 'with a new camera'. 'It feels good atmosphere' is ungrammatical; use 'it creates a good atmosphere' or 'the atmosphere feels good'. Match subject and verb and use appropriate article before 'atmosphere'.