视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct awkward word choices, avoid repetition, and limit length to 3–4 sentences. Use specific supporting details (what kinds of views, an example of a memorable photo, and why it mattered). Add linking words (for example, "because" or "so") correctly.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like landscapes and city skylines because they help me remember trips — for example, a sunset photo I took on a coastal trip always reminds me of that day. I also often share my favourite shots on social media so friends can see where I’ve been.

建议: Make your main idea clear in one sentence, then give two specific supporting points with correct collocations and simpler grammar. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas logically.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer peaceful natural scenery and local culture. For example, I enjoy visiting old villages where I can see traditional houses and learn about local customs, which helps me relax and refresh my mind.

建议: Correct serious word choice errors ("abuses" is wrong), reduce repetition, and use a clear structure: state preference, give reasons with specific examples, and finish with a brief conclusion. Keep answers under five sentences and use appropriate linking words like "because" and "for example."

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they show different histories and natural landscapes. For example, seeing ancient temples or coastal cliffs abroad teaches me about another culture and gives me fresh perspectives. This broadens my knowledge and refreshes my mind.

× Yes, certainly I do like taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, certainly I like taking pictures of different views.

Redundant use of auxiliary 'do' with 'like' in a simple present affirmative sentence. Use 'I like' for habitual actions. Suggestion: remove 'do' unless used for emphasis (e.g., 'I do like' for contrast).

× It's a funny hobby to me.

✓ It's an enjoyable/fun hobby for me.

'Funny' usually means 'amusing' and may be odd here; 'to me' is less natural than 'for me'. Use 'enjoyable' or 'fun' and 'for me' to express personal opinion. Suggestion: use 'It's a fun hobby for me.'

× I like to take pictures and normally whenever I travel to somewhere because it helps me to remember the places or the moments later.

✓ I normally like to take pictures whenever I travel because it helps me remember places and moments later.

Unnecessary combination of 'and' with 'because' and redundant words 'to somewhere'. Word order and connectors were incorrect. Suggestion: place adverb 'normally' before verb, use 'whenever I travel', remove 'to' before 'remember', and use parallel nouns 'places and moments'.

× And after picturing the different views, I normally like to share it on social media with my friends.

✓ After taking pictures of different views, I normally like to share them on social media with my friends.

Pronoun agreement error: 'it' refers to plural 'pictures' so use 'them'. Also 'picturing' is less natural than 'taking pictures'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun matches number of noun and use natural collocation 'take pictures'.

× I do prefer the pieces of rural areas because in rural areas we can see many historical, cultural and many natural beauty scenery of which helps us to learn something new or to refresh our minds.

✓ I prefer rural areas because we can see much historical and cultural heritage and many natural beautiful sceneries there, which help us learn something new or refresh our minds.

Multiple article and word-choice issues: 'the pieces of rural areas' is incorrect; 'many historical, cultural and many natural beauty scenery' is ungrammatical. Use 'prefer rural areas', 'historical and cultural heritage' or 'historical and cultural sites', 'natural beautiful sceneries' (or better 'natural scenery'), and 'which help' agrees with plural antecedent. Suggestion: simplify phrase, fix article use, and ensure subject-verb agreement with relative clause.

× So I do prefer and like to visit the rural areas.

✓ So I prefer and like visiting rural areas.

Awkward verb forms and redundant 'do'. Use simple present 'prefer' and gerund 'visiting' for liking activities. Suggestion: remove auxiliary 'do' and use 'visiting' for natural phrasing.

× Certainly I do prefer the abuses of another country because from the views of another country we can normally know many things about the other countries history, culture or views as natural beauty.

✓ Certainly I prefer the attractions of another country because, from the views of another country, we can usually learn many things about that country's history, culture, and natural beauty.

Several errors: 'do prefer' unnecessary, 'abuses' is wrong word choice for 'attractions', missing possessive apostrophe in 'countries history', and 'views as natural beauty' is awkward. Also verb choice 'can normally know' is unnatural; use 'can usually learn'. Suggestion: replace 'abuses' with 'attractions', use possessive 'country's', and natural verbs 'learn'.

× So and and which I think in which I think helps us to increase our knowledge and refresh our mind both.

✓ I think this helps us increase our knowledge and refresh our minds.

Redundant and incorrect conjunctions and relative pronouns ('So and and which I think in which I think') create an incoherent sentence. Also 'refresh our mind both' is ungrammatical and 'mind' should be plural 'minds'. Suggestion: simplify to a clear main clause, remove redundant words, and ensure plural agreement.