视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and article/noun agreement, reduce redundancy, and make answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail with a linking phrase. Also avoid repeating similar phrases.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially natural landscapes such as forests, mountains and lakes. For example, when I travel I usually focus on wide-angle shots of the scenery, and I sometimes take a few portraits of myself at memorable spots.

建议: Make the response direct and coherent: give a clear preference, use linking words to explain reasons, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles), and avoid confusing clauses. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and provide a specific example.

示例: I generally prefer urban views because most of my trips are to cities, where I enjoy photographing architecture and busy streets. For instance, I like capturing tall buildings at sunset and the lively scenes around tourist attractions.

建议: Clarify your main idea and give specific reasons: state a clear preference (or say you have no strong preference), explain with coherent reasons and avoid unclear phrases like “contribution depended.” Use correct sentence structure and cultural sensitivity when mentioning personal background.

示例: I appreciate views from all countries because each place reflects its own culture and history. However, I feel particularly connected to landscapes and sites in my own country because they reflect the Hindu traditions and heritage I grew up with.

× Yes, I like to taking a picture of different view especially for natural places like forest, mountain and lake area.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially natural places like forests, mountains, and lake areas.

Using 'like to taking' is incorrect; after 'like' use the gerund 'taking' or the infinitive 'to take' (not both). Also noun forms: 'a picture of different view' should be plural 'pictures of different views' to match general preference, and place nouns need plural forms and articles where appropriate. Suggestion: use 'I like taking pictures of different views' and pluralize place names and 'lake areas' or 'lakes' for clarity.

× Besides this, I like to take a picture of myself whenever I go on holiday or attending any party.

✓ Besides that, I like to take pictures of myself whenever I go on holiday or attend a party.

Mixing structures: 'whenever I go on holiday or attending any party' is inconsistent. After 'whenever' use the base verb form 'attend' to match 'go'. Also use plural 'pictures' for habitual action and replace 'this' with 'that' for coherence.

× In my opinion, it depends on the views or the place that I'm visiting it.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on the views or the place I am visiting.

The clause 'that I'm visiting it' is ungrammatical because both a relative pronoun 'that' and the pronoun 'it' are used redundantly. Use either 'that I'm visiting' or 'I am visiting'. Also 'views or the place' is better kept parallel as 'the views or the place'.

× But majority of the places that I visit is the urban area.

✓ But the majority of the places that I visit are urban areas.

'Majority' as a noun phrase referring to plural 'places' requires the plural verb 'are'. Also 'the urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' to match 'places'. Include 'the' before 'majority' for grammaticality.

× So I like to take a picture of urban area.

✓ So I like to take pictures of urban areas.

Missing article and number agreement: 'a picture of urban area' is incorrect. For general preference, plural 'pictures of urban areas' is natural. If singular intended, use 'a picture of an urban area'.

× In the urban area I always take a picture of building the rural area and the lakeside.

✓ In urban areas I always take pictures of buildings, rural areas, and lakesides.

Original sentence lacks proper list structure and articles. Use plural forms for general habits and separate items with commas. 'Building the rural area' seems to conflate items; list each: 'buildings, rural areas, and lakesides'.

× That or the tourist place.

✓ I also photograph tourist places.

'That or the tourist place' is a fragment and unclear. Convert to a complete sentence, e.g., 'I also photograph tourist places.' This makes the meaning explicit and grammatical.

× I like every country's view, They have a different perspective and they make their views according to their culture wise and the history wise.

✓ I like every country's views. They have different perspectives, and they shape their views according to their culture and history.

Run-on and punctuation: replace comma with period and start new sentence. 'Country's view' better as 'country's views' (plural). 'Culture wise' and 'the history wise' are incorrect idioms; use 'according to their culture and history' or 'in terms of culture and history'. Also 'They have a different perspective' should be 'different perspectives' to match plural subjects.

× Apart from this, my contribution depended on the Hindu culture rather than any other culture.

✓ Apart from that, my preference is influenced more by Hindu culture than by other cultures.

Tense and word choice: 'my contribution depended' is inappropriate in this context; likely intended 'my preference depends' or 'is influenced'. Use present 'is influenced' to match earlier general statements. Also 'Hindu culture' doesn't need 'the', and use 'than by other cultures' for parallel structure.