视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, and give one specific reason and one brief example. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and reduce filler words (uh).

示例: I don't usually take photos of every view because I prefer to experience the moment directly. For example, when I hike I concentrate on the sounds and smells of the forest rather than stopping to photograph each tree, so I feel more relaxed and present.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'exposed to nature', 'helps me relax'), avoid repetition, and provide a brief specific example or contrast with urban views.

示例: I prefer rural landscapes to urban ones because I don't get much contact with nature during my daily routine. For instance, when I walk in the countryside I can enjoy trees and mountains and breathe fresh air, which helps me relax much more than noisy city streets.

建议: Begin with a direct topic sentence and reduce hesitations. Provide specific examples and link them logically (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Fix minor grammar issues ('original unique' -> 'distinctive', 'my own countries' -> 'my own country').

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers distinctive scenery and strong cultural variety across the four seasons. For example, spring festivals and traditional wooden houses create a special atmosphere that makes me proud and more drawn to domestic landscapes.

× I don't like taking pictures of different views because I prefer spending time.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of different views because I prefer to spend time.

Use of verb patterns: after 'prefer' followed by an infinitive requires 'to' + base verb ('to spend'). 'Prefer' can take either gerund or infinitive but here the sentence already uses 'to' later, so 'to spend' is correct and consistent. Use: 'prefer to spend' or 'prefer spending' but keep consistent.

× I prefer to spend time focusing on actual situation rather than, uh, photographing everything.

✓ I prefer to spend time focusing on the actual situation rather than photographing everything.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'actual situation' is an article error and affects meaning; classified here as present tense / general statement usage. Use 'the actual situation' to refer to a specific context. Also remove unnecessary comma before 'photographing'.

× So I focus on, uh, nature around.

✓ So I focus on the nature around me.

Sentence lacks object clarity: 'nature around' is incomplete. Add the definite article 'the' and object 'me' (or 'me' can be omitted if 'around me' used) to create correct prepositional phrase 'around me'. This fixes sentence structure and preposition use.

× I prefer landscapes in countryside because I'm not often exposed myself to nature in my daily life.

✓ I prefer landscapes in the countryside because I'm not often exposed to nature in my daily life.

Incorrect reflexive pronoun 'exposed myself' — 'exposed to' is passive and does not take a reflexive pronoun here. Use 'exposed to nature'. Also 'in countryside' needs the definite article 'the countryside'.

× So when I take a walk in countryside, I can enjoy trees, mountains, being surrounded by greens.

✓ So when I take a walk in the countryside, I can enjoy the trees and mountains and being surrounded by green scenery.

Missing article 'the' before 'countryside' and 'trees, mountains' often take 'the' when speaking of specific scenery. 'Greens' is informal and not typically used; use 'green scenery' or 'greenery'. This corrects article use and word choice.

× So it helps, helps me relaxed.

✓ So it helps me relax.

Incorrect form 'relaxed' follows 'helps' + object; the correct pattern is 'help' + base verb (bare infinitive) — 'help me relax'. Remove duplicate 'helps'.

× So that's why I love, uh, nature in.

✓ So that's why I love nature.

Fragment: 'nature in' is incomplete. Remove the stray preposition 'in' to form a complete sentence 'I love nature.'

× Uh, I prefer views in my country because we have original unique scenery.

✓ Uh, I prefer views in my country because we have original, unique scenery.

Missing comma between coordinate adjectives 'original' and 'unique' — they are equal modifiers and should be separated by a comma. Also sentence is acceptable otherwise.

× For example, we have Four Seasons.

✓ For example, we have four distinct seasons.

'Four Seasons' capitalized suggests the brand or hotel; when referring to seasons, use lowercase and clarify with 'four distinct seasons'. This corrects adjective usage and clarity.

× Each season has a unique and, uh, culture and atmosphere.

✓ Each season has a unique culture and atmosphere.

Redundant 'and' after 'unique and' is incorrect. Remove the extra conjunction and filler 'uh' for clarity: 'unique culture and atmosphere.'

× And also we have traditional architecture.

✓ We also have traditional architecture.

Sentence beginning with 'And also' is informal and redundant. Use 'We also have' for smoother sentence structure.

× So whenever I see them, I'm proud of my country.

✓ So whenever I see it, I'm proud of my country.

Pronoun 'them' refers to plural but 'my country' is singular. Use 'it' to refer to the country, or change 'them' to a plural noun like 'sites' if intended. This fixes pronoun agreement with the antecedent.

× So I prefer views in my own countries.

✓ So I prefer views in my own country.

Mismatch: 'my own countries' is plural but speaker has one country. Use singular 'country' to match 'my own'. If speaker means multiple countries, context should change. This corrects singular/plural usage.