视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (e.g., "my profession", "hairdressing work").

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. As a hair stylist, I create before-and-after photos and short videos for social media, so I need shots from several angles to show the hairstyle clearly. For example, I usually take front, side and back views to highlight the cut and styling.

建议: Start with a direct statement, then add two specific reasons using linking words (because/so). Improve grammar and fluidity (e.g., "I prefer rural areas because...").

示例: I prefer rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful. Also, the natural light and green surroundings make them ideal for photography and relaxing walks.

建议: Give a clear, direct answer (one sentence) and then explain with specific comparisons or reasons. Avoid unclear words (“boat”? “royal”) and check sentence structure. Mention concrete examples of places or features you like.

示例: I like views both in my home country and abroad. For instance, Sri Lanka has stunning beaches and lush landscapes, while Wellington in New Zealand offers dramatic coastal scenery and peaceful hills, so I enjoy different kinds of scenery in both places.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures, different views.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views.

The original sentence omits the preposition 'of' required to link 'taking pictures' to 'different views'. This is a sentence structure/preposition error. Use 'taking pictures of different views' to show what is being photographed.

× I'm, I'm a hair stylist.

✓ I'm a hair stylist.

The repetition of 'I'm,' is unnecessary and creates a disfluent sentence. Remove the extra 'I'm' to make a clear declarative sentence.

× My, my professional needs a hairdressing.

✓ My profession requires hairdressing skills.

The original uses 'professional' and 'needs' incorrectly and repeats 'My,'. The corrected sentence uses the noun 'profession' and the verb 'requires' to express the idea clearly and grammatically.

× So I'm doing the social media.

✓ So I manage social media.

'Doing the social media' is awkward and nonstandard. Use a clearer verb like 'manage' or 'run' with 'social media' for natural English.

× So I do before and after videos and the photos.

✓ So I make before-and-after videos and photos.

'Do before and after videos and the photos' is ungrammatical. Use 'make' for producing media and hyphenate 'before-and-after'. Remove the article 'the' before 'photos' unless referring to specific photos.

× So it's really important to take from the different views for the different views on different sides.

✓ So it's really important to take photos from different angles and sides.

The original repeats 'different views' and uses 'take from' incorrectly. Use 'take photos from different angles/sides' to correctly express perspective; 'from' should attach to 'take photos', and redundant phrases should be removed.

× Yes I I like rural area more natural so I like the natural light as well and the quiet natural like green filled areas.

✓ Yes, I like rural areas more; they feel more natural, and I like the natural light and quiet, green places.

The original has repetition ('I I'), singular/plural mismatch ('rural area' vs meaning plural), and awkward word order ('quiet natural like green filled areas'). The correction fixes repetition, uses plural 'areas', clarifies that rural areas 'feel' more natural, and reorganizes adjectives: 'quiet, green places'.

× I do like boat and Sri Lanka also.

✓ I do like boats, and I also like Sri Lanka.

The original omits plural for 'boat' and has unclear coordination. Use plural 'boats' if referring generally, and separate the items with a conjunction: 'boats, and I also like Sri Lanka.'

× We have beautiful places and at the moment I'm living in Wellington, New Zealand.

✓ We have beautiful places, and at the moment I'm living in Wellington, New Zealand.

Mainly needs a comma before the conjunction for clarity. The tense usage is correct: present simple 'have' for general truth about the country and present continuous 'I'm living' for a temporary situation.

× So Wellington is a quiet royal nature wise, a beautiful place.

✓ So Wellington is a quiet, beautiful place, rich in natural scenery.

The phrase 'royal nature wise' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'rich in natural scenery' or 'beautiful natural surroundings'. Add a comma between adjectives 'quiet' and 'beautiful'.

× So basically I would like both.

✓ So basically I would like both.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as is. No correction needed.