视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate and a bit more concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and filler sounds.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes. For example, I often take pictures of natural landscapes and birds because I love their colours and details, and I also photograph festivals to capture lively moments. When I'm bored, I look back at these photos to remember special occasions.

建议: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words. Reduce repetitions and filler words; use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘prefer rural areas’ not ‘fuse’).

示例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they are much quieter and more relaxing. For instance, there is less traffic noise and more open space, so I can focus on photography and enjoy peaceful scenery.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and then provide specific examples with correct names and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating fillers. Mention one or two distinct reasons or attractions.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I find its landscapes uniquely beautiful. For example, we have many mountains and the long sandy beach of Cox's Bazar, which attracts tourists; these places offer spectacular scenery and a variety of photo opportunities.

× Yes, I love taking picture different views such as nature, birds and uh many festivals.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views such as nature, birds and many festivals.

The student used the singular noun 'picture' when the plural 'pictures' is required because they refer to multiple photos. Also the preposition 'of' is needed after 'taking pictures' to link to what is being photographed. Improve by making nouns agree in number and include necessary prepositions: 'taking pictures of'.

× I love to capture memories and when I feel bored I see the pictures.

✓ I love to capture memories, and when I feel bored I look at the pictures.

The verb phrase 'see the pictures' is unnatural here; 'look at' is the correct verb+preposition combination to mean viewing photographs. This is an issue with verb choice and use of appropriate verb patterns. Use 'look at' to express intentionally viewing something.

× I prefer fuse in rural areas because, uh, rural areas are very quiet and relax, relax place.

✓ I prefer to stay in rural areas because they are very quiet and relaxing places.

Several problems: 'fuse' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'stay' or 'live'. The student omitted the infinitive marker 'to' after 'prefer', and used 'relax' (adjective/adverb confusion); 'relaxing' is the correct adjective describing 'places'. Also plural agreement: 'places'. Improve by using 'prefer to stay', 'rural areas are very quiet and relaxing places'.

× Uh, you cannot, uh, bear to umm, many sound and.

✓ You cannot bear too much noise, and...

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Bear' requires an object (what cannot be borne); 'many sound' is incorrect: use 'too much noise' or 'a lot of noise'. This is an incorrect use of nouns/pronouns and missing object. Suggest: 'You cannot bear too much noise'.

× I prefer views in my countries because I love my countries and it's very beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I love my country and it is very beautiful.

The student used the plural 'countries' but refers to their own single country; use singular 'country'. Also pronoun 'it's' was used; expand to 'it is' for clarity. Ensure number agreement between possessive and noun: 'my country'.

× Uh, there are many mountain and the longest sea place in the world that's called Cox Bajar, uh, and many natural place where tourists and people, uh, can enjoy the scenery and.

✓ There are many mountains and the longest sea beach in the world, which is called Cox's Bazar, and many natural places where tourists and people can enjoy the scenery.

Multiple pluralization errors: 'mountain' should be 'mountains'; 'place' should be 'places'. 'Sea place' is awkward; 'sea beach' or simply 'beach' is better. Also use a relative clause 'which is called Cox's Bazar' to give the name. Ensure plural nouns agree with 'many' and use correct place name spelling: 'Cox's Bazar'.