视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Говорите более связно и грамматически правильно; уменьшите заполнители (uh, umm) и постарайтесь давать полные предложения. Добавьте связующее предложение и конкретные детали о том, какие именно виды вам нравятся и почему, но не более 4–5 предложений. Например: сначала утвердительная тема, затем причина и пример, используя слова-связки (because, so, for example).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different scenes because they help me capture memories. For example, I often photograph city streets and sunsets, and then I edit the best shots before sharing them with friends on social media.

建议: Избегайте повторений и заполнителей; сформулируйте ясное короткое утверждение, затем объясните причину с конкретным описанием. Используйте связки (because, since, as) и приведите один пример уникальной детали города (архитектура, ночная жизнь).

示例: I prefer urban views because I live in a city and I enjoy its lively atmosphere. For instance, I like modern architecture and busy streets lit up at night, which I find more exciting than quiet countryside scenes.

建议: Уберите повторы и заполнители; дайте чёткое утверждение и расширьте его одной-двумя конкретными причинами или примером. Используйте связки (because, for example, such as) и конкретные слова (culture, historical architecture, landscapes).

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing different cultures and historical architecture. For example, I love visiting old European towns with narrow streets and centuries-old buildings, which feel very different from places at home.

× Yes, I like take, take a photo, uh, I like, uh, different pose, uh, on photo and uh, umm, and sharing with my friends on social media.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos in different poses and share them with my friends on social media.

The student omitted the infinitive marker 'to' after 'like' and used base verb 'take' incorrectly; also 'a photo' should be plural 'photos' to match the general activity, and 'different pose on photo' is incorrect word order and articles. Use 'share them' to refer back to 'photos'. Suggestion: use 'like to + base verb' for habits and pluralize when speaking generally: 'I like to take photos in different poses and share them with my friends on social media.'

× Uh, I prefer urban views, uh, because I live in, uh, I live in city and uh, uh, city has uh, most beautiful, uh, beautiful.

✓ I prefer urban views because I live in a city and the city is very beautiful.

Missing article 'a' before 'city' and awkward repetition. Also 'most beautiful' without a noun or comparison context is incorrect; use 'very beautiful' or 'one of the most beautiful' with context. Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('a', 'the') and choose correct degree words: 'I live in a city and the city is very beautiful.'

× Uh, I prefer, uh, views in other countries because I enjoy, uh, another, uh, culture, uh, and uh, historical, uh, historical architecture and uh, uh, the environment.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy different cultures, historical architecture, and the environment.

Use plural 'cultures' when speaking generally about other countries, avoid redundant words ('another, culture' is awkward), and do not repeat 'historical'. Also use parallel structure listing nouns without extra articles. Suggestion: use plural forms for general statements and maintain parallel list structure: 'I enjoy different cultures, historical architecture, and the environment.'