视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid vague phrasing like “make me show” and replace it with clearer expressions (e.g. “helps me capture my perspective”). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to connect reason and example.

示例: Yes, I love photographing different views, especially when I travel. For example, I often capture city skylines at sunset because the light highlights the buildings and shows my perspective on urban life.

建议: Give a direct preference and then support it with specific reasons. Avoid repeating “depends” and unclear phrases like “how I look on the particular subject.” Use a linking word (e.g. “but” or “because”) to organise your answer and include a concrete example or contrast.

示例: I like both, but I prefer urban views because I enjoy the geometric lines and lively scenes they offer. For instance, I often photograph busy streets and architecture to capture movement and contrast.

建议: Be concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and an example. Remove small grammatical errors (e.g. “prefer views and in other countries” → “prefer views in other countries”) and add linking words like “because” or “for example.”

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer unfamiliar landscapes and cultural scenes. For example, when I visited Japan I photographed traditional streets and rural hills that I had never seen at home.

× I do love taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel.

✓ I do love taking pictures of different views, especially when I am traveling.

The original sentence uses 'when I travel', which is acceptable, but to emphasize ongoing action during travel the present participle 'am traveling' is more natural in this context. Use present continuous for actions happening around a time period (when I am traveling). Suggestion: prefer 'when I am traveling' for clarity of ongoing action.

× It makes me show what kind of perspective I have on a particular subject.

✓ It allows me to show the kind of perspective I have on a particular subject.

'It makes me show' is unnatural in English; 'make' + verb usually means force someone to do something. The intended meaning is 'enables' or 'allows'. Replacing with 'allows me to show' corrects the structure and conveys the intended meaning. Also add 'the' before 'kind' for specificity.

× It depends on where I am actually, but I do love both.

✓ It actually depends on where I am, but I do love both.

Adverb placement: 'actually' is better placed before the verb or clause it modifies. Moving 'actually' before 'depends' makes the sentence flow more naturally. No tense change needed.

× It depends on the subject I want to take pictures of and sometimes it depends on how I feel and how I look on the particular subject.

✓ It depends on the subject I want to take pictures of, and sometimes it depends on how I feel about the particular subject and how I view it.

Problems: 'how I look on the particular subject' is incorrect because 'look on' is not used to mean 'think about' or 'feel about'. Use 'feel about' or 'view' instead. Also adding a comma and splitting into clearer phrases improves readability.

× I love discovering places so I prefer views and in other countries because it shows new landscapes and experiences.

✓ I love discovering places, so I prefer views in other countries because they show new landscapes and experiences.

Several issues: extra 'and' before 'in other countries' is incorrect; remove it. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'views' (plural) instead of singular 'it'. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. This fixes subject-pronoun agreement and preposition placement.