视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 concrete details or a brief reason. Avoid vague adjectives like "aesthetic" alone; give an example of what you find appealing. Keep it to under five sentences and use a linking word for coherence.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes because I love capturing changing light and colors at sunrise or sunset. For example, I often take photos of the way mist sits over fields early in the morning, which creates interesting layers and mood.

建议: Clarify your preference and give coherent supporting details. Begin with a clear statement (urban or rural), then explain why with specific reasons and an example. Avoid contradictory or confusing phrases (e.g., saying urban because it reminds you of nature). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and keep sentences complete.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the mix of architecture and green spaces. For example, city parks and riverside promenades offer interesting contrasts between buildings and trees, and I like photographing how light reflects off glass fronts next to trees.

建议: Make your opinion clearer and give specific comparisons. State your preference directly, then explain with concrete reasons (what is "limited" and what is "broader"). Provide an example of a country or scene you prefer. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and avoid unfinished sentences.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different landscapes and cultural scenes that I don't see at home. For example, I enjoy photographing coastal cliffs in Portugal and colorful street markets in Morocco, which feel more diverse than the familiar scenery near my hometown.

× I prefer view in urban areas to rural areas because it reminds me of how beautiful nature is.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas to those in rural areas because they remind me how beautiful nature is.

The noun 'view' should be plural ('views') to match 'urban areas'. Also when comparing two sets use 'those in' to refer back to 'views in rural areas'. Pronoun agreement: 'it reminds me' should be 'they remind me' to agree with plural 'views'. Use 'how beautiful nature is' (no change needed) for correctness.

× The striking sound of the bats, the street.

✓ I also enjoy the striking sounds of bats and the atmosphere of the streets.

The original fragment lacks a main verb and clear connection to the previous sentence. Turn the fragment into a complete sentence by adding a subject and verb. Make 'sound' plural ('sounds') to match multiple sources and use 'streets' or 'the streets' to be natural. Adding 'also enjoy' connects to the idea of preference.

× I prefer view in other countries to my own country because most of the views in my country will be limited so I have more or bright broader views to appreciate in other countries like.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to those in my own country because many views in my country are limited, and I can appreciate broader, brighter views abroad.

Change 'view' to plural 'views' and use 'those in' to refer back to views in 'my own country'. 'Will be limited' is incorrect tense and modality; use simple present 'are limited' to state a general fact. 'More or bright broader views' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'broader, brighter views'. Remove trailing 'like' and use 'abroad' for clarity.