视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Говорите короче и увереннее: начните с прямого ответа, уберите повторы, междометия и заполнители (uh, umm), добавьте одно-два конкретных примера для поддержки мысли. Также следите за грамматикой и завершённостью фраз.

示例: I don't usually take many photos, but I do photograph beautiful places when I travel because photos help me remember the atmosphere. For example, I took several pictures of a mountain lake last summer to recall its clear water and peaceful setting.

建议: Дайте ясный топик-сентенс и конкретизируйте причину, избегая повторов и слов-паразитов. Используйте связки (because, so, for example) и конкретные детали, чтобы звучать убедительнее.

示例: I prefer rural views because I love natural landscapes. For example, I enjoy hiking in the mountains and sitting by rivers, where the scenery is peaceful and untouched by humans.

建议: Отвечайте прямо и плавно: сформулируйте причину предпочтения и добавьте конкретный пример или сравнение. Уберите лишние «uh» и повторения, используйте связочные слова (because, therefore, for instance).

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because Armenia has beautiful mountains and landscapes that I can visit easily. For instance, I often go to nearby hills to enjoy the scenery, so I don't need to travel abroad to see impressive nature.

× I'm not a big fan of taking pictures, but sometimes when I visit some beautiful sites, I I really like taking pictures as they can, uh, serve as a memory in the future and you can always, uh, umm, like look at them and uh, remember all your.

✓ I'm not a big fan of taking pictures, but sometimes when I visit beautiful sites, I really like taking pictures because they can serve as memories in the future and you can always look at them and remember them.

Repeated filler words and 'serve as a memory' is unidiomatic because 'memory' here should be plural 'memories'; also redundant pronouns and fillers were removed. Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity; use 'remember them' to avoid sentence fragment.

× Actually, I'm a big fan of nature and uh, views in rural areas are always more preferable for me as uh, I uh, like mountains, rivers and some uh, natural views which are not, uh, humanly.

✓ Actually, I'm a big fan of nature and views in rural areas are always preferable to me because I like mountains, rivers and natural scenery that is not man-made.

'More preferable' is redundant; 'preferable' already implies comparison—use 'preferable to' or just 'prefer'. 'Some natural views' is vague; 'natural scenery' is better. 'Not humanly' is incorrect; use 'not man-made'. Remove fillers for fluency.

× As I live in Armenia, we have a quite wonderful, uh, nature, uh, with lots of mountains and other beautiful sites. I uh, prefer my country views in my country, uh, so I don't need to travel far away and can experience that beauty every day.

✓ As I live in Armenia, we have quite wonderful nature with lots of mountains and other beautiful sites. I prefer the views in my country, so I don't need to travel far and can experience that beauty every day.

'We have a quite wonderful, nature' is incorrect: 'quite wonderful nature' without 'a' is idiomatic. 'Prefer my country views in my country' is repetitive; use 'prefer the views in my country'. Remove fillers and redundant phrases for clarity.