视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and errors (e.g., use “Some people are interested in photography,” not “taking interest”).

示例: No, I don't usually take pictures because I prefer to enjoy the scene directly. For example, when I visit the beach I focus on the sounds and colours rather than trying to photograph everything.

建议: Make your preference clear and avoid contradictory statements. Use linking words (because, however) and give specific examples. Correct grammar (use plural/singular consistently) and avoid confusing references to 'rural' vs 'urban'.

示例: I prefer rural views because the open countryside lets me see sunrises and sunsets clearly. However, in cities tall buildings often block those views, so urban areas are less appealing for watching the sky.

建议: Answer directly and briefly, then support with a specific reason. Fix grammar and remove repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and give one concrete example (mountains, coast).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I can easily visit mountains and coastal spots that offer beautiful sunrises. For example, last summer I watched the sunrise over a nearby mountain and the experience felt special and familiar.

× Some people taking interest in pictures but I don't like and I am just enjoying the view and each and and everything's.

✓ Some people take an interest in photography, but I don't. I just enjoy the view and everything.

The original uses 'taking interest' which is incorrect; the correct expression is 'take an interest' (verb + noun), not verb + -ing. Also there are redundant conjunctions and colloquial fragments. Suggestions: use 'take an interest in' for hobbies, split into two sentences for clarity, and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× I mostly prefer enjoying the views in rural area because there are we can see the sunset and sunrise.

✓ I mostly prefer enjoying views in rural areas because we can see the sunset and sunrise there.

The phrase 'in rural area' is incorrect; use the plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area'. 'There are we can see' is ungrammatical; 'there' should come at the end or use 'because we can see... there.' Suggestions: use 'rural areas' for general statements and place 'there' after the clause if needed.

× But in rural area there are many big cities and big buildings by which we can't see the views of sunset and sunrise.

✓ But in some rural areas there are many large towns and buildings that can block our view of the sunrise and sunset.

Again 'in rural area' should be 'in some rural areas' or 'in certain rural areas'. 'Big cities' contradicts 'rural'; 'large towns' or 'settlements' fits better. 'By which we can't see' is awkward; use 'that can block our view of' to show cause. Suggestions: choose consistent vocabulary (rural vs city) and use relative clauses correctly ('that can block').

× I'm not travelling in other country now but I am enjoying my own country views because we can see the each each things like sunset, sunrise and the perfect views and mountain views each and everything.

✓ I am not traveling to other countries now, but I am enjoying the views in my own country because we can see things like the sunrise, the sunset and mountain views.

Tense and aspect need correction: 'I'm not travelling in other country now' is awkward—use 'traveling to other countries' or 'traveling abroad.' Remove repeated words ('each each', 'each and everything') and redundant adjectives ('perfect views'). Use plural 'countries' and 'views in my own country'. Suggestions: use 'traveling abroad' for idiomatic expression, avoid repetition, and list examples clearly with articles ('the sunrise, the sunset').