视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Améliorez la fluidité et corrigez les erreurs grammaticales et de vocabulaire. Évitez les hésitations (« umm ») et les répétitions. Structurez la réponse avec une phrase principale claire, puis une ou deux phrases de soutien précises (par exemple où/quel type de vues et ce que vous recherchez dans une photo). Corrigez des erreurs comme « views landscape » → « landscapes » et « lightning » → « lighting ».

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I travel frequently, and whenever I encounter a stunning landscape I take time to capture it when the lighting is best. I often look for empty foregrounds and interesting lines to create a balanced composition.

建议: Clarifiez la réponse avec une phrase topic claire et évitez formulations confuses. Supprimez mots inutiles et hésitations. Utilisez vocabulaire précis pour comparer (e.g., 'urban areas are vibrant and architecturally interesting; rural areas are serene and natural') et utilisez un mot de liaison pour relier idées (e.g., 'however', 'because').

示例: That's difficult because I like both types of views. Urban areas often offer striking architecture and dynamic scenes, whereas rural areas provide peaceful natural landscapes; therefore, my preference depends on the mood I want to capture.

建议: Rendez la réponse directe et corrigez le vocabulaire inapproprié. Évitez proverbes sans explication et erreurs (par ex. 'these Jews' est incorrect). Dites clairement votre préférence, donnez une raison précise et un exemple. Utilisez connecteurs comme 'because' ou 'however'.

示例: I usually prefer views in other countries because new places feel more exciting and offer different cultural landscapes. For example, seeing coastal villages in Italy felt fresher to me than familiar scenes at home, so I often seek foreign views when I travel.

× I do like taking pictures of different views.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views.

The use of 'do' for simple present affirmation is unnecessary here; use the simple present 'I like' for habitual actions. Suggestion: remove auxiliary 'do' unless adding emphasis.

× Umm, I used to travel a lot and every time we arrive in front of this beautiful, uh, stunning views landscape, I love taking the time to take the right pictures with the light right lightning and empty them.

✓ Umm, I used to travel a lot and every time we arrived in front of this beautiful, stunning landscape, I loved taking the time to take the right pictures with the right lighting and edit them.

Mixed tenses and incorrect words: 'used to' requires past reference so 'arrive' should be past 'arrived' and 'I love' should be past 'I loved'. 'views landscape' is wrong word order and redundancy; 'stunning landscape' is correct. 'lightning' means electrical discharge; use 'lighting'. 'empty them' is incorrect verb for photo editing; use 'edit them'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and choose correct nouns/verbs.

× That's a tough question to be honest.

✓ That's a tough question, to be honest.

Missing comma for clarity; 'to be honest' is a sentence adverbial and should be set off with a comma. Suggestion: add punctuation to separate the main clause and the parenthetical phrase.

× I can't answer your traits.

✓ I can't answer that truthfully.

'Your traits' is incorrect in this context. The speaker likely means 'answer that truthfully' or 'answer your question'. Suggestion: use 'that' or 'your question' and adverb 'truthfully'.

× I can't decide if there are preferred one or either the other one, umm, cause both of them have a particularly beautiful beauty on its own.

✓ I can't decide if I prefer one or the other, because both of them have their own particular beauty.

Incorrect pronouns and phrasing: 'there are preferred one' is ungrammatical; use 'I prefer one or the other'. 'cause' should be 'because'. 'particularly beautiful beauty' is redundant; use 'their own particular beauty'. Suggestion: use clear subject 'I' and concise noun phrases.

× Uh, some cities, urban cities, umm, majestic and modern, while some uh, rurals are pretty.

✓ Some urban cities are majestic and modern, while some rural areas are pretty.

'Urban cities' is redundant (cities are urban by definition); use 'urban areas' or 'cities'. 'rurals' is not a noun; use 'rural areas' or 'rural places'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and avoid redundancy.

× To answer to that question, I will use a really famous expression.

✓ To answer that question, I will use a really famous expression.

The verb phrase 'answer' does not require the preposition 'to' when followed by the object; use 'answer that question'. Suggestion: drop the extra 'to'.

× Grass is always greener in the neighbor garden.

✓ Grass is always greener in the neighbor's garden.

Possessive needed: 'neighbor garden' should be 'neighbor's garden'. Also common idiom is 'the grass is always greener in the neighbor's garden' or 'on the other side'. Suggestion: use possessive form for nouns acting as owners.

× So by that I mean that I'm used to see views in France.

✓ So by that I mean that I'm used to seeing views in France.

After 'used to' when expressing a habit/state, use the gerund 'seeing' or use 'used to see' for past habit. 'I'm used to seeing' (present state) requires 'seeing'. Suggestion: use 'used to' + gerund for 'be used to' constructions.

× And by getting, uh, used to see these Jews, I don't see any more of the same beauty than someone else can see it.

✓ And by getting used to seeing these views, I no longer see the same beauty that someone else might see.

Multiple errors: 'used to see' should be 'used to seeing' as noted. 'these Jews' is an incorrect word; likely 'these views'. 'don't see any more of the same beauty than someone else can see it' is awkward and ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I no longer see the same beauty that someone else might see.' Suggestion: correct vocabulary and simplify comparative clause.

× So I would choose, uh, views.

✓ So I would choose other views.

Context implies preference for views in other countries; 'views' alone is vague. Add 'other' to clarify choice. Suggestion: make the object explicit to match the question's contrast.