视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, like) and repetition (spend spending). Use linking words to connect ideas. Also give a brief specific example to make the answer more vivid.

示例: No, I don't usually take pictures of every view because I prefer to soak up the experience with my senses. For example, when I visit the coast I like to listen to the waves and smell the sea air, which helps me remember the place better than photos would.

建议: Start with a clear direct answer and correct grammar (e.g., 'the nature... is' not 'are'). Replace vague words like 'overwhelming and unnatural' with precise descriptions. Reduce fillers and add one specific detail or example using a linking word (for example, because, such as) to support your opinion.

示例: I prefer rural views because the natural scenery is peaceful and green. For example, when I walk in the countryside I can see endless fields and tall trees, which helps me relax and breathe fresh air.

建议: Give a direct answer (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries') and correct grammar (use singular/plural correctly). Eliminate hesitations and organize supporting details with linking words (for example, because, such as). Provide a concise specific example of a place and what you like about it.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures. For example, I love visiting places in Africa where wide savannahs and rugged mountains let me feel relaxed and enjoy fresh mountain air.

× I don't like taking pictures of different views because I prefer to spend spending time focusing on sounds, views rather than taking a picture of everything.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of different views because I prefer to spend time focusing on sounds and scenes rather than taking a picture of everything.

The phrase 'spend spending time' is redundant; use 'spend time' + verb-ing or 'prefer to spend time focusing' (verb + -ing). Also 'views' in this context is better as 'scenes' or use 'and' to join 'sounds' and 'scenes'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to spend time focusing on sounds and scenes' to be concise and grammatically correct. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× So I love uh, like feeling those uh, nature in my mind.

✓ So I love, like, feeling that nature in my mind.

'Those nature' is incorrect because 'nature' is an uncountable noun and should use 'that nature' or no demonstrative. Use 'that' to refer to the general experience. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. This fits article/pronoun usage issues. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I prefer views in rural areas because, uh, the nature of rural areas are overwhelming and unnatural for me.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the nature of rural areas is overwhelming and natural to me.

The subject 'the nature' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'Unnatural' contradicts intended meaning; likely 'natural' was meant. Replace 'for me' with 'to me' for natural expression. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× So it's like, uh, huge green, I can be surrounded by a lot of trees.

✓ It's like vast greenery where I can be surrounded by many trees.

Original is fragmented and uses incorrect noun phrase 'huge green'. Recast as 'vast greenery' (correct noun) and connect clauses with 'where' to show relation. Also use 'many trees' for countable plural noun. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Uh, I really, really enjoy those, uh.

✓ I really, really enjoy that.

'Those' is a plural demonstrative and is vague here; use 'that' to refer to the previously mentioned scenery/experience. Remove filler 'uh'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I prefer using another countries, uh, because especially I love the nature, uh, the views of, uh, Africa because it's a lot of there, there's a lot of nature there.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries because I especially love the nature and views of Africa; there is a lot of natural landscape there.

'Using another countries' is incorrect: use 'visiting other countries.' 'It's a lot of there' is ungrammatical; replace with 'there is a lot of natural landscape there.' Also avoid repeating fillers. Adjust verb forms and quantifiers for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I can feel I can, it helps me relax and mountain trees freshers.

✓ I can feel it helps me relax, and the mountains and trees make me feel refreshed.

Original has repetition 'I can feel I can' and an ungrammatical fragment 'mountain trees freshers.' Combine ideas: 'I can feel it helps me relax' and use 'the mountains and trees make me feel refreshed.' Correct verb forms and noun usage. Grammar problem type ID: 12