视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), avoid contradiction in the same sentence, and give one short supporting detail with a linking word. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "having my photos taken" is okay but restructure for clarity).

示例: No, I don't usually take photos myself because I prefer experiencing a scene rather than photographing it. However, I don't mind posing for pictures when friends ask, since it helps me remember the moment.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, use correct vocabulary and grammar, and give a specific supporting detail with linking words. Avoid unclear words ("I free" and "fats") and be specific about what you like in rural areas.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and help me relax. For example, walking through quiet fields and along country paths lets me breathe fresh air and escape city noise.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence and use correct singular/plural and article usage ("palaces" or "a palace"). Add a specific detail and a linking word to explain why your country's views appeal to you. Keep sentences concise and natural.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because Korea has many beautiful traditional sites. For instance, walking around historic palaces lets me appreciate architecture and peaceful gardens, which makes me feel relaxed.

× I free for rural areas because they're peaceful and comfortable.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they're peaceful and comfortable.

The student used 'I free for' which is ungrammatical; the intended verb is 'prefer' (choice between options). This is a sentence structure/verb choice error. Suggestion: use 'prefer' for comparisons of likes, and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and comfortable.'

× Atmosphere makes me feel relaxed such as walking in the quiet natural fats.

✓ The atmosphere makes me feel relaxed, for example when I walk in the quiet natural paths.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'atmosphere' and incorrect phrase 'such as walking' and wrong word 'fats' (should be 'paths'). This is an article error combined with sentence structure and word choice. Suggestion: add 'the' to specify which atmosphere, use 'for example' or 'such as' with a noun phrase ('walking' needs a subject or 'when I walk'), and correct spelling 'paths'.

× I like scenery views in my own country because Korea has beautiful traditional places like palace.

✓ I like scenic views in my own country because Korea has beautiful traditional places like palaces.

'Scenery views' is awkward; use 'scenic views'. Also 'palace' needs plural or an article: 'places like palaces' or 'places like a palace' depending on meaning. This is an article and noun form error. Suggestion: use 'scenic views' and pluralize 'palace' or add an article: 'places like palaces' or 'places like the palace.'

× I like walking the palace, it makes me feel relaxed.

✓ I like walking around the palaces; it makes me feel relaxed.

'Walking the palace' is incorrect collocation; you 'walk around' or 'walk through' a place. Also run-on comma splice: two independent clauses joined incorrectly. Suggestion: use 'walking around the palaces' and separate clauses with a semicolon or period: 'I like walking around the palaces. It makes me feel relaxed.'

× Actually, I don't enjoy taking photos, but I don't mind having my photos taken of many different views.

✓ Actually, I don't enjoy taking photos, but I don't mind having my photo taken of many different views.

'My photos taken of many different views' is awkward—use singular 'my photo taken' or better 'having my photos taken' is okay; original mixing of plural is acceptable but word order is odd. Primary issue is wording and pronoun reference. Suggestion: simpler: 'I don't mind having my picture taken in front of many different views' or 'having my photos taken of different views.'