视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp cơ bản, sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cấu trúc ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý. Cụ thể: bắt đầu bằng câu trực tiếp trả lời (Yes/No + lý do), sau đó nêu 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ai, khi nào, ví dụ) và kết thúc bằng câu tóm tắt. Sửa các lỗi như “Show” → “Sure/Yes”, “measures of differentiation” → “photos” hoặc “pictures”, và loại bỏ các từ thừa như “when” lặp lại.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures because they help me remember special moments with family and friends. For example, when we travel I often take photos of scenic views and candid moments. These pictures let me relive the experience later and share memories with others.

建议: Làm rõ câu chủ đề và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “I prefer urban areas because…”). Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (attractive spots → attractive cafés or photogenic spots) và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể để giải thích lý do. Dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” để nối ý, giữ tổng số câu không quá 5.

示例: I prefer urban areas because my city is large and modern with many photogenic cafés and landmarks. For example, there are trendy streets and rooftop cafés where my family and I often take pictures. These places offer interesting backgrounds and convenient facilities.

建议: Sửa ý mâu thuẫn trong câu: xác định rõ bạn thích trong nước hay nước ngoài. Kiểm soát ngữ pháp và ngữ nghĩa (ví dụ “cultural shine” không đúng), nói rõ lý do cụ thể (chi phí, khoảng cách, cảnh đẹp, văn hóa) và cho ví dụ thực tế. Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng và dùng 1-2 câu bổ trợ với liên từ như “because” hoặc “for example”.

示例: I prefer travelling to other countries because I enjoy experiencing different cultures and landscapes. For example, visiting Japan allowed me to see unique temples and try local food, which I cannot find at home.

× Show I like taking measures of differentiation because I want to recall a memorable moment with my friends or family when, for example, when we are when we travel our favorite special occasion I want to have a beautiful.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I want to remember memorable moments with my friends or family, for example when we travel or on special occasions I want to have beautiful photos.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: wrong word choice ('Show' instead of 'So', 'measures of differentiation' instead of 'pictures of different views'), unnecessary repetition ('when' repeated), missing punctuation and connectors, and incorrect word order. Suggestion: replace incorrect words with appropriate vocabulary, break into clauses with commas, and use coordinating conjunctions to join ideas clearly. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I refer since its urban areas because the my city is very large and modern.

✓ I prefer urban areas because my city is very large and modern.

Errors include wrong verb 'refer' (should be 'prefer'), incorrect possessive 'its' and extra article 'the' before 'my city'. Suggestion: use the correct verb 'prefer' for stating preference, remove redundant words, and use 'my' directly before 'city'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× There are many coffee attractive spots for taking family photos.

✓ There are many attractive coffee shops where you can take family photos.

Word order is incorrect ('coffee attractive spots'); 'coffee spots' is informal. Better collocation is 'coffee shops' or 'cafes' and relative clause 'where you can take' clarifies purpose. Suggestion: use natural noun phrases and proper adjective order. Grammar problem type ID:26

× In other countries, I refer views in my own country because it's much cheaper and easier to travel within.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because it is much cheaper and easier to travel within.

The sentence misuses 'refer' instead of 'prefer' and has confusing structure 'In other countries' at the start which conflicts with the intended meaning. Suggestion: start with 'I prefer' and state the reason; place 'within' after 'travel' to indicate travelling within the country. Grammar problem type ID:26

× For example, I can visit beautiful landscapes and cultural shine with us spending much time or money.

✓ For example, I can visit beautiful landscapes and cultural sites without spending much time or money.

'Cultural shine' is not a correct collocation; likely meant 'cultural sites'. 'With us spending' is awkward; use 'without spending' to express absence of cost/time. Suggestion: use correct noun 'sites' and the negative preposition 'without' to show not spending a lot. Grammar problem type ID:13