视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答能表达主要观点，但句子结构和用词有多处错误，影响流畅度和清晰度。建议：1) 用一两句话直接回答（主题句），比如“Yes, I do”或“No, I don't”，随后用1-2个简洁句子解释原因；2) 注意时态和语法（如avoid后接动名词taking pictures）；3) 使用连接词（because, so, since）时保持逻辑；4) 控制长度不超过5句，避免重复细节。示例练习：把回忆与现在行为区分清楚，例如先说明不拍照，然后说明原因并举例。

示例: No, I don't usually take pictures of views because I'm not confident in my photography skills. For example, when I was in high school my friends laughed at my photos, so since then I tend to avoid taking pictures and often ask someone more skilled to take them for me.

建议: 回答表达了偏好但逻辑和词汇不够准确，部分句子不自然。建议：1) 先给出明确偏好（I prefer...），然后用1-2个具体理由支持；2) 使用更地道的短语（e.g. city lights, busy streets）并避免不恰当的表达（“have many money, many power”）；3) 用连接词（because, for example）使观点连贯；4) 控制句子数量并保持自然。

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the city atmosphere. For example, the city lights, busy streets and modern buildings make the scene lively and interesting to look at.

建议: 观点明确且有理由，但表达不够自然，语法和词汇需改进。建议：1) 用更自然的表达方式（e.g. I prefer to see landscapes in my own country）；2) 具体说明原因并给出例子（mention mountains, deserts, rivers, historical sites）；3) 修正语法错误（‘sceneries’应为’scenery’或具体名词复数）；4) 避免无意义的短语（“So you can you”）。

示例: I prefer views in my own country because China has a wide variety of landscapes. For instance, we have mountains, deserts, rivers and historic sites, so I can experience many different kinds of scenery without traveling far.

× So I will since that time I avoid to taking pictures and it sometimes I will ask someone more confident in that to do it.

✓ Since that time I have avoided taking pictures, and sometimes I ask someone who is more confident to do it.

原句中“avoid to taking”是不正确的搭配，动词“avoid”后应接动名词（-ing）而不是不定式；此外时态与时间状语不一致，句首有“Since that time”应使用现在完成时“have avoided”。句中“someone more confident in that”表述不自然，应改为“someone who is more confident”。建议记住常见动词搭配（如 avoid + -ing）并注意完成时用于从过去持续到现在的动作。

× No, because I'm not confident in my photography skills.

✓ No, because I'm not confident in my photography skills.

此句语法正确，无需改动。保持现在时态描述当前的自我感觉是合适的。

× I still remember when I was in Senior High School all of my friends laughed at my pictures.

✓ I still remember that when I was in senior high school, all of my friends laughed at my pictures.

主要问题是句子需要在“remember”后使用从句连接词“that”以使结构更清晰；“Senior High School”大小写不必全部大写，且句中逗号有助于分隔时间状语。时态（过去时“laughed”）是正确的。说明：在回忆过去事情时，用过去时并加连接词会更自然。

× So I will since that time I avoid to taking pictures and it sometimes I will ask someone more confident in that to do it.

✓ Since that time I have avoided taking pictures, and sometimes I ask someone who is more confident to take them.

进一步改写以改正两处错误：1) avoid 后接动名词 taking；2) 用完成时 have avoided 表示自那时起持续的状态；3) 用更自然的短语“ask someone to take them”。建议多练习常见搭配如 ask sb to do sth 和 avoid + -ing。

× In my own opinion, I think the views in urban areas will be more attractive because every time when I see the lighting and the cars in the city, I feel it's the urban time.

✓ In my opinion, I think the views in urban areas are more attractive because whenever I see the lights and cars in the city, I feel it's urban life.

问题包括用词和时态：1) “In my own opinion”冗余，常用“In my opinion”；2) “will be more attractive”不合语境，表示一般喜好应用一般现在时“are more attractive”；3) “lighting”用于城市灯光应为“lights”；4) “it's the urban time”表达不自然，改为“it's urban life”更符合语境。建议注意固定表达和在描述常态喜好时用一般现在时。

× It's the have many money, many power.

✓ It shows wealth and power.

原句语法混乱：“It's the have many money, many power”不符合英语结构。应用简洁的名词短语或动词短语表达城市体现“财富和权力”，例如“shows wealth and power”。建议学习常见表达结构，避免直译中文词序。

× Absolutely, I will choose the views in my country because China is a very big country, it has almost every sceneries around the world.

✓ Absolutely, I would choose the views in my country because China is a very big country; it has almost every kind of scenery found around the world.

问题包括时态和词形：1) 在表达偏好时用“would”或“would prefer”比“will”更礼貌/自然；2) “almost every sceneries”有数与数不一致，scenery是不可数名词，应改为“every kind of scenery”或“almost all types of scenery”；3) 两个分句用分号或句点分开更清晰。建议注意不可数名词和表达假设/偏好时常用的情态词。

× So you can you.

✓ So you can too.

原句“So you can you.”多余重复“you”，语法错误。应为“So you can too.”或“So can you.”来表达“你也可以去”。建议注意避免口语中的重复并学会几种常见回应句型。