视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: まず主旨を明確に伝え、文法ミスを直しましょう。現在形と過去形の使い分け（"enjoy traveling"、"I learned"）と不定詞/動名詞の誤用を修正してください。また、話を自然に繋げるために接続詞（for example, so, becauseなど）や短い補足を使い、冗長さを避けつつ具体例を付け加えると効果的です。発音や語順も注意し、1〜3文で簡潔に述べてください。

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy traveling, so I often take photos of landscapes. For example, when I visit mountains or coastlines I try to capture the light and composition to make the view look dramatic.

建议: まず直接的に好みを述べ、その理由を一つか二つの具体的な詳細で補強しましょう。会話調の表現（'you know'、'cause'）は控えめにし、接続詞（because、so）を正しく使うと自然です。また地名を複数挙げるなら理由ごとに整理し、文は最大5文に収めてください。

示例: I prefer urban views because cities like Tokyo and Fukuoka are very colorful and full of interesting architecture. Because of the variety of lights and street scenes, it's easier to find striking subjects for photographs.

建议: 理由を明確にし、曖昧な語（'period'）や文法ミス（主語と動詞の一致）を直しましょう。"used to"と"comfortable"の使い方を正しくし、誇りを示すなら具体的な例（地元の特色や風景）を一つ挙げると説得力が増します。話し言葉の挿入（'yeah'）は削減してください。

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more comfortable and familiar with the surroundings. For example, the local festivals and traditional neighborhoods in my city create unique scenes that make me proud and excited to photograph them.

× Yes I do. I enjoy to traveling a lot therefore I learn.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy traveling a lot; therefore I learn.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive with to. Use 'enjoy traveling' rather than 'enjoy to traveling'. Also add commas or punctuation to join clauses correctly. Example improvement: 'I enjoy traveling a lot; therefore I learn.'

× I had learn how to take landscape so I really like take pictures in different view.

✓ I have learned how to take landscape photos, so I really like taking pictures of different views.

The speaker is describing a past experience with present relevance, so present perfect 'have learned' is appropriate. 'Learn' requires past participle 'learned'. Use 'photos' or 'photographs' after 'landscape' and the verb 'like' must be followed by gerund 'taking'. Use the plural 'views' and include 'of' for the object of taking pictures. Suggestion: 'I have learned how to take landscape photos, so I really like taking pictures of different views.'

× I prefer urban view more than you know 'cause my favorite city is Tokyo and Fukuoka.

✓ I prefer urban views more, because my favorite cities are Tokyo and Fukuoka.

Use plural 'views' when speaking generally. 'More' can stand alone; include 'because' for clarity. City names are plural so use 'cities are'. Avoid informal contractions in formal responses. Suggestion: 'I prefer urban views more, because my favorite cities are Tokyo and Fukuoka.'

× There it's really colorful so it looks amazing in photo.

✓ There it's really colorful, so it looks amazing in photos.

Use plural 'photos' when speaking generally. Use 'in photos' rather than 'in photo'. Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so'. Suggestion: 'There it's really colorful, so it looks amazing in photos.'

× I prefer view in my country to other country there because I am really used to that period.

✓ I prefer views in my country to those in other countries because I am really used to them.

Use plural 'views' and 'other countries' for general comparison. Replace 'that period' (unclear) with 'them' referring to views; 'used to' should be followed by noun or gerund—here 'used to them' means familiar with them. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in my country to those in other countries because I am really used to them.'

× So they makes me really comfortable and then I'm proud of my city, yeah.

✓ So they make me really comfortable, and I'm proud of my city.

The subject 'they' (referring to views) requires the base verb 'make', not 'makes'. Remove informal filler 'yeah' for clarity and add a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: 'So they make me really comfortable, and I'm proud of my city.'