视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer communicates the main idea but has grammatical errors, some redundancy and awkward phrasing. To improve, make a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Use one or two brief supporting details and a linking word for clarity. For example, replace "catch a picture" with "take a photo", use present perfect or simple past appropriately, and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of views. Because they help me preserve memories, I often take pictures of places I visit so I can look back and remember specific moments. For instance, I keep photos of family trips and landscapes to remind me of those experiences.

建议: Good clear preference and supporting reasons, but watch vocabulary (plural/singular), repetition and tone (avoid absolute negative statements). Improve coherence by using linking words and varied vocabulary, and reduce repetition like "big big". Mention specific examples briefly and add a concluding sentence to sum up.

示例: I prefer rural scenery because urban areas often have pollution, heavy traffic and high-rise buildings, which I find less attractive. In contrast, rural places offer natural features like rivers, mountains, trees and many birds, so I feel more relaxed and inspired there.

建议: Your answer expresses a preference but is somewhat repetitive and contains awkward phrases. Improve by giving a direct topic sentence, specifying what aspects you like about your country's views, and using linking words to organize ideas. Avoid repeating phrases like "each and every" and clarify the final statement.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it has great cultural and scenic diversity. For example, one region might have traditional villages and rice terraces while another has coastal cliffs and modern cities. This variety means I can see many different landscapes and cultural scenes without travelling abroad.

× I like to catch a picture where that I have seen in order to store for the future memory.

✓ I like to take pictures of scenes that I have seen to keep as memories for the future.

The verb phrase 'catch a picture' is incorrect; use 'take pictures'. 'Where that I have seen' is ungrammatical; use 'scenes that I have seen' or 'places I have seen'. 'Store for the future memory' is awkward; use 'keep as memories for the future'. Also ensure plural 'pictures' matches general activity.

× I wish to see the picture that I have already taken so it will remind me of the past things that happened to me.

✓ I like to look at pictures I have already taken because they remind me of things that happened in the past.

Verb choice and tense: 'I wish to see' sounds like desire for future viewing; better 'I like to look at' for habitual action. 'The picture' should be plural 'pictures' when speaking generally. 'Past things that happened to me' is redundant; use 'things that happened in the past' or 'past events'.

× I prefer to view the scenery of rural area because in urban I can't see anything other than pollution, vehicle traffic and big big buildings.

✓ I prefer to view the scenery of rural areas because in urban areas I can't see anything other than pollution, traffic and very tall buildings.

Countable nouns need correct plurality: 'rural area' should be 'rural areas' when speaking generally. 'Urban' must be followed by 'areas' or 'cities' to be grammatical. 'Vehicle traffic' is redundant; 'traffic' suffices. Repetition 'big big' should be 'very tall' or 'large'.

× But I can enjoy lots of nature in rural areas, especially river, mountains, trees, lots of birds.

✓ But I can enjoy a lot of nature in rural areas, especially rivers, mountains, trees and many birds.

'Lots of nature' should be 'a lot of nature'. List items need correct plural forms: 'river' -> 'rivers'. Use parallel structure and replace 'lots of birds' with 'many birds' for variety.

× To be honest, I wish to see my country views because my country has large diversity.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to see views in my own country because it has great diversity.

'Wish to see my country views' is unnatural; use 'prefer to see views in my own country'. 'Large diversity' is awkward; 'great diversity' or 'a lot of diversity' is better. Also use 'it' to refer to 'my country' to avoid repetition.

× If we see each and every place, there will be different culture and culture related sceneries, pictures.

✓ If we visit different places, we will find different cultures and culture-related scenery and photos.

'See each and every place' is wordy; 'visit different places' is clearer. 'There will be different culture' needs plural 'cultures'. 'Culture related sceneries, pictures' is ungrammatical; use 'culture-related scenery and photos'.

× We can see each and every corner in a different way. So in here.

✓ We can see each corner in a different way, so I prefer staying here.

'Each and every' is redundant; 'each corner' suffices. 'So in here' is not a complete or grammatical phrase; clarify meaning (example given: 'so I prefer staying here' or 'so I like it here'). Pronoun/reference should be clear.