视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words; use correct grammar for negative forms (e.g., "I don't like taking pictures") and body-related vocabulary (e.g., "I feel self-conscious about my appearance").

示例: I don't really like taking pictures of views. For example, I often feel self-conscious about my face, so I avoid having my photo taken. However, I sometimes take photos of landscapes when I'm alone because I want to remember the scene.

建议: Answer directly and improve grammar: use a clear topic sentence ("I prefer rural views"). Use linking words ("because", "for example", "as a result") and give one concrete reason with a short example. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors ("views are more beautiful", "it reduces stress").

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are more natural and peaceful. For example, green fields and forests make it easier for people to relax, and as a result many visitors feel less stressed than in busy cities.

建议: Give a clear, grammatically correct opinion first ("I prefer views in my own country") and then support it with specific details: name regions correctly and describe features (e.g., "northern forests, steppe, mountains"). Use linking phrases ("for example", "in particular") and finish coherently rather than trailing off.

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because Kazakhstan has diverse and beautiful nature. For example, the northern forests and the vast steppe are especially striking, and the mountains in the south offer dramatic scenery, so I find our landscapes more impressive than many foreign places.

× Uh, especially I don't like to, uh, taking picture because, uh, sometimes I, uh, shame, uh, from my face.

✓ Actually, I don't like taking pictures because sometimes I'm ashamed of my face.

The original has incorrect verb form and word choice. Use 'don't like taking pictures' (verb + -ing) and plural 'pictures'. 'I shame from my face' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'I'm ashamed of my face' (adjective 'ashamed' + preposition 'of'). Suggestion: use 'don't like taking pictures' and 'I'm ashamed of my face.' Grammar problem type ID:8

× That's why, uh, I really don't like taking picture.

✓ That's why I really don't like taking pictures.

Use the gerund 'taking' to follow 'like' and plural 'pictures'. Also remove extraneous filler words. Suggestion: say 'I don't like taking pictures.' Grammar problem type ID:8

× Uh, for me, rural areas, uh, views is more beautiful.

✓ For me, rural areas' views are more beautiful.

'Views' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Also show possession with 'rural areas' views' or restructure. Suggestion: use 'views are' or 'the views in rural areas are.' Grammar problem type ID:27

× So, you know, umm, rural areas, uh, so natural views and also it helps for, uh, people to relax.

✓ Rural areas have natural views, and they also help people relax.

Incorrect sentence structure and unnecessary preposition 'for'. Use plural subject 'they' to refer to 'rural areas' and the verb 'help' without 'to' after 'help'. Also use 'have natural views' rather than just listing. Suggestion: 'Rural areas have natural views, and they help people relax.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× On the other hand, it reduce, uh, many stress.

✓ On the other hand, it reduces a lot of stress.

Verb agreement error: present tense 'reduce' should be 'reduces' for singular 'it' (third person singular). Also 'many stress' is incorrect; use 'a lot of stress' or 'much stress'. Suggestion: 'it reduces a lot of stress.' Grammar problem type ID:5

× That's why a real areas is more, uh, better.

✓ That's why rural areas are better.

Multiple errors: 'a real areas' is incorrect; likely 'rural areas'. 'Areas' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. 'More better' is redundant; use 'better' only. Suggestion: 'rural areas are better.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× Uh, for me, uh, I prefer a view in my country's views is more beautiful than other countries because, you know, Kazakhstan's, uh, nature is so beautiful, especially, uh, especially N fur and north part, uh, you know, uh, so forest, uh, forest station.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because Kazakhstan's nature is very beautiful, especially the north and the forests.

Original has confused structure and article misuse. Use 'the views in my country' for specificity. Remove repetition and unclear phrases like 'N fur' and 'forest station'. Use 'north' not 'north part' and 'the forests' to be clear. Suggestion: simplify: 'I prefer the views in my country because Kazakhstan's nature is very beautiful, especially in the north and its forests.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× And on the other hand.

✓ (This sentence is incomplete and should be completed or removed.)

This is a sentence fragment without a main verb or object. Either complete the thought (for example, 'On the other hand, some people prefer other countries') or remove it. Sentence fragments are grammatically incorrect. Grammar problem type ID:23