视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce redundancy (the phrase “I also enjoy photographing” is repetitive) and correct minor grammar (e.g., use ‘when I’m’).

示例: Yes, I do. I particularly enjoy photographing natural scenery like trees, rivers and sunsets because it helps me preserve peaceful moments. Additionally, when I’m in the city I sometimes take creative shadow shots to experiment with light and composition.

建议: Good structure and specific reasons. To improve further, use a linking phrase at the start of the second sentence and vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘solitude’ or ‘tranquility’). Keep sentences concise and natural.

示例: I prefer views in remote areas because natural features like trees and rivers help me relax. Moreover, I appreciate the solitude there, so I can take long walks or read by the water without distractions.

建议: Be careful with coherence and tone. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a concise example. Avoid absolute statements (e.g., 'overcrowded everywhere') and use linking words to connect contrast (e.g., 'however' or 'in contrast'). Also correct tense and phrasing: say ‘I didn’t experience that in Taiwan’ or ‘it felt crowded’.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I often find more peaceful and open landscapes abroad. For example, when I visited Australia I could enjoy quiet beaches and wide horizons, whereas in Taiwan many popular spots felt crowded and less tranquil.

× I also enjoy photographing.

✓ I also enjoy taking photographs.

The verb 'photographing' as a standalone gerund is grammatical, but in conversational English 'take photographs' is more natural. This is a style/word choice adjustment rather than a strict grammar correction. Use 'taking photographs' to sound more natural and to match collocations.

× I prefer views in remote areas because sceneries such as trees and rivers help me relax.

✓ I prefer views in remote areas because scenery such as trees and rivers helps me relax.

The word 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use 'scenery' (singular/uncountable) with a singular verb 'helps'. Alternatively, keep 'scenery' plural sense by rephrasing to 'scenic features such as trees and rivers help me relax'.

× I also enjoy being there alone since no one bothers me and I can go for long walks or read by the water without distractions.

✓ I also enjoy being there alone since nobody bothers me and I can go for long walks or read by the water without distractions.

'No one' is acceptable, but 'nobody' is slightly more natural in spoken English; this is a stylistic preference rather than strict grammatical error. The original sentence is grammatical; the suggestion improves spoken register. If sticking strictly to grammar list items, this sentence does not require change.

× I prefer views in other countries, for instance in Australia, even though there are some well known landscapes that many tourists know, I can still enjoy the peaceful moment.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, for instance in Australia. Even though there are some well-known landscapes that many tourists know, I can still enjoy peaceful moments.

This original is a run-on sentence: two main clauses are joined improperly with a comma. Split into two sentences or use a semicolon. Also add a hyphen in 'well-known' (compound adjective before a noun) and change 'the peaceful moment' to plural 'peaceful moments' to match general experience. These edits fix sentence structure and article/adjective usage.

× However, that didn't happen when I was in Taiwan, which is overcrowded everywhere.

✓ However, that didn't happen when I was in Taiwan, which was overcrowded everywhere.

The clause refers to a past situation ('when I was in Taiwan'), so the relative clause should use past tense 'was' to maintain tense consistency. Using present tense 'is overcrowded' could be acceptable if referring to a general present truth, but since the main clause is past ('didn't happen' / 'was in Taiwan'), use past tense for coherence.