视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, but slightly repetitive (mentions enjoying photography twice) and a little long. Make the structure clearer by giving a direct topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repeating the same idea word-for-word.

示例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing natural scenes like trees, rivers and sunsets because they help me capture peaceful moments. For variety, when I am in the city I sometimes take creative shadow shots to explore shapes and contrast.

建议: This answer is clear, coherent and specific. To improve further, add a short linking word to connect reasons and include a brief example or comparison to strengthen the response. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

示例: I prefer rural views because natural scenery like trees and rivers helps me relax. For example, I can go for long walks or sit by the water to read without being disturbed, which I rarely experience in the city.

建议: The answer expresses preference and gives a contrast, but has some awkward phrasing and a negative generalisation about Taiwan. Improve by using clearer sentence structure, more precise vocabulary (e.g. "crowded" instead of "overcrowded in every city and landscape") and a linking phrase to contrast. Consider a brief positive detail about the foreign location to balance the comparison.

示例: I usually prefer views in other countries, such as in Australia, because wide open beaches and quiet national parks let me enjoy peaceful moments. By contrast, cities in Taiwan are often crowded, so I find it harder to relax there.

× Sometimes I start to take creative shots of my shadow when I am out in the city.

✓ Sometimes I start taking creative shots of my shadow when I am out in the city.

Use 'start' + -ing form for actions that begin and continue: 'start taking' is more natural than 'start to take' in this context. Change improves verb pattern consistency and fluency.

× I prefer views in remote areas because the scenery such as trees and rivers helps me relax.

✓ I prefer views in remote areas because scenery such as trees and rivers help me relax.

Subject 'scenery such as trees and rivers' is treated as a plural idea here; the verb should agree with the plural notion 'trees and rivers' (help). Alternatively, remove 'such as' clause or rephrase to 'the scenery... helps me relax' if treating 'scenery' as singular.

× I also enjoy being isolated there since no one bothers me and I can go for long walks or read by the water without distractions.

✓ I also enjoy being there alone since no one bothers me and I can go for long walks or read by the water without distractions.

'Being isolated' can imply forced separation; 'being there alone' fits the intended meaning of preferring solitude. This is a word-choice/pronoun-context issue: 'there' should be paired with 'alone' to clearly express voluntary solitude.

× I prefer views in other countries, for example in Australia, even though there are some well known landscapes that many tourists know, I can still enjoy the peaceful moment.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, for example in Australia; even though there are some well-known landscapes that many tourists know, I can still enjoy peaceful moments.

Run-on sentence and article/adjective issues: insert a semicolon or split into two sentences to fix structure. 'Well-known' needs a hyphen; 'peaceful moment' should be plural 'peaceful moments' to match general meaning. This involves sentence structure and adjective/adverb usage.

× However, that didn't happen when I was in Taiwan, which is overcrowded in every city and landscape.

✓ However, that didn't happen when I was in Taiwan, which is overcrowded in every city and scenic area.

'Landscape' is countable and not idiomatic here; use 'scenic area' or 'region'. Also ensure past tense 'didn't happen' correctly contrasts with the descriptive clause. This corrects word choice and noun form to fit the past participle context.