视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant but slightly repetitive (you say you love photography twice) and could be more concise. Improve by using one strong topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘capture’ or ‘landscapes’) and avoid general phrases like ‘I enjoy photography’ immediately after stating the same idea.

示例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy capturing natural landscapes like sunsets, rivers and tree-lined paths because they help me preserve peaceful moments. For example, when I visit the park I often try different angles and lighting to capture reflections on the water or the warm glow of dusk.

建议: This answer is relevant, well-structured and gives specific reasons, but there are small language issues (singular/plural: 'remote area' should be 'remote areas' or 'the countryside') and you could add a linking word for flow. Also keep it to a maximum of 4–5 sentences to be concise.

示例: I prefer views in the countryside because natural scenery like trees and rivers helps me relax. For instance, I enjoy being away from crowds so I can go for long walks and read by the water without distractions.

建议: Your position is clear and you give a contrastive example, which is good. Improve by correcting grammar ('peaceful moment' → 'peaceful moments'; 'it didn't happen' → 'I didn’t experience that') and avoiding absolute statements like 'overcrowded in every city and landscape.' Add a linking word (e.g., 'however' is fine) and one brief specific detail about what makes other countries' views preferable.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I often find quieter, less crowded landscapes. For example, in Australia I could enjoy peaceful coastal walks and wide open spaces, whereas when I visited Taiwan the popular city areas felt crowded and busy, so I couldn’t relax as much.

× I prefer views in remote area because the scenery such as trees and rivers help me relax.

✓ I prefer views in remote areas because the scenery, such as trees and rivers, helps me relax.

The noun 'area' should be plural 'areas' to match 'views' and general meaning. Also 'scenery' is a singular uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'helps'. Add commas around the example phrase 'such as trees and rivers' for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural 'areas' for general statements and ensure subject-verb agreement with uncountable nouns (scenery + helps).

× However, it didn't happen when I was in Taiwan, which is overcrowded in every city and landscape.

✓ However, that didn't happen when I was in Taiwan, which is overcrowded in every city and landscape.

The pronoun referring back to the previous idea should be 'that' (demonstrative) rather than 'it' to clearly reference 'being able to enjoy the peaceful moment.' Using 'that' makes the sentence grammatical and clearer. Also consider replacing 'landscape' with 'area' or 'region' if intended; 'every city and landscape' is slightly odd but not strictly listed as a required correction. Suggestion: Use 'that' to refer to the whole preceding clause.