视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler phrases (“you know”, “uh”), and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep answers under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph mountains and coastal scenery to remember the trip. Additionally, I try to capture candid moments of people I meet to show the local atmosphere.

建议: Give a direct answer then support it with specific reasons. Remove hesitations and correct vocabulary (e.g., use “architectural” instead of “Arctic”). Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

示例: I prefer photographing urban areas because I enjoy the contrast and scale of tall buildings. For example, I like capturing interesting architectural details and bustling street scenes that show city life.

建议: Answer directly and organize supporting points with linking words (“in my country… , whereas in other countries…”). Avoid fillers and be specific about what you photograph and why.

示例: I like views in both my country and abroad. In my country I often photograph historic buildings and temples to preserve cultural memories, whereas in other countries I focus on natural landscapes and everyday street scenes to learn about local lifestyles.

× Yes, I do like clicking, you know, different types of pictures, trying to capture the scenery and the mountains as I really, you know, enjoy traveling.

✓ Yes, I like taking different kinds of pictures, trying to capture the scenery and the mountains because I really enjoy traveling.

Multiple issues: unnecessary auxiliary 'do' for emphasis is acceptable but informal; 'clicking' is informal and 'taking' is more natural (Verb choice - falls under Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice but per list use 13), 'different types of pictures' is awkward; 'as' used to mean 'because' is colloquial but acceptable. Recommendation: use 'like taking' and 'kinds of pictures' and 'because' for clarity and formality. Grammar problem type ID:13, Grammar problem type:Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs

× And then I like to, you know, capture the moments in my camera, uh, of different views.

✓ I also like to capture moments with my camera of different views.

'capture the moments in my camera' is incorrect prepositional use; we capture moments with a camera (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). Remove filler words and use 'also' for flow. Grammar problem type ID:11, Grammar problem type:Incorrect use of prepositions

× I prefer clicking, uh, pictures of urban areas as I really like, you know, looking forward to the huge buildings and, uh, their Arctic architecture.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of urban areas because I really like looking at the huge buildings and their architecture.

'clicking pictures' is informal; use 'taking pictures' (word choice - ID 13). 'looking forward to' is incorrect here; it means anticipating something in the future, but the intended meaning is 'looking at' (Incorrect use of prepositions/verbs - ID 11). 'Arctic architecture' seems wrong unless they meant 'architectural' or a specific style; use 'their architecture' or specify the style. Recommendation: replace 'looking forward to' with 'looking at' and 'Arctic' with 'architectural' if appropriate. Grammar problem type ID:11, Grammar problem type:Incorrect use of prepositions

× It's, it's really, uh, enjoyable.

✓ It's really enjoyable.

Repeated 'it's' and filler 'uh' are disfluent but not grammatical errors. Simplify to 'It's really enjoyable.' This is a sentence structure/fluency issue (ID 26). Grammar problem type ID:26, Grammar problem type:Sentence structure errors

× I would say both.

✓ I would say both.

This sentence is acceptable and grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× Even in my country, if I go for any visit, then I would like to, you know, capture those, uh, buildings and the temples when I move.

✓ Even in my country, when I visit, I like to capture buildings and temples as I go.

'go for any visit' is unnatural; use 'when I visit' (Sentence structure/word choice - ID 26). 'when I move' is incorrect here; likely intended 'as I go' or 'while I am there' (Incorrect use of prepositions/phrasing - ID 11). Remove filler words and 'those' which is unnecessary. Recommendation: 'when I visit' and 'as I go' or 'while I am there.' Grammar problem type ID:11, Grammar problem type:Incorrect use of prepositions

× When I go to other countries, I would like to capture their nature, their scenery and about their lifestyle.

✓ When I go to other countries, I like to capture their natural landscapes, scenery, and lifestyle.

'I would like' is acceptable but present simple 'I like to' matches the habitual context (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'their nature, their scenery and about their lifestyle' has incorrect use of 'about' before 'their lifestyle' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11) and repetition. Suggest: 'natural landscapes, scenery, and lifestyle.' Grammar problem type ID:11, Grammar problem type:Incorrect use of prepositions