视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammatical errors, and give specific examples with correct tense. Limit to up to 5 sentences and use linking words (e.g., "for example", "also"). Correct vocabulary (e.g., "rarely seen") and remove repetition.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they often give me new insights and show scenes that are rarely seen. For example, I recently photographed exhibits at a local museum, and on another day I took photos of the beach at sunset. I sometimes post these photos on social media to share what I discover.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence then support with clear, specific reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer urban areas"), avoid filler sounds, and use linking words like "because" and "however". Replace vague phrases with concrete details (e.g., "cafés, architecture, and busy streets").

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the lively atmosphere and varied architecture. For instance, I like visiting shopping malls and sitting in cafés to watch people and city life. However, I sometimes appreciate rural views for their peaceful landscapes.

建议: Answer directly then give specific reasons and examples. Fix grammar (e.g., "I prefer views in other countries"), avoid fillers, and use precise reasons (e.g., "cultural diversity, new architecture, different landscapes"). Keep sentences concise and coherent with linking words like "for example".

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing new cultures and landscapes. For example, when I visited Singapore last year I loved the modern skyline, and my trip to Taiwan last month introduced me to beautiful mountain scenery. These trips gave me fresh perspectives and memorable experiences.

× Yes I do, because different views can make new insights and I can see something that rarely people seem like.

✓ Yes, I do, because different views can give me new insights and I can see things that people rarely see.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and word order: 'make new insights' is unnatural; use 'give me new insights'. 'something that rarely people seem like' has incorrect pronoun placement and verb choice. Use 'things that people rarely see' for clarity and correct subject-verb placement. Suggestion: place the subject 'people' before the verb and use 'see' for the action. ID:12

× Sometimes I post about visiting museum and in another day I went went to the beaches and tomorrow.

✓ Sometimes I post about visiting museums; another day I went to the beach and tomorrow I will go again.

Errors include wrong or missing prepositions/articles and awkward time sequence. Use 'visiting museums' (plural or 'a museum') and 'went to the beach' (singular and correct article). 'In another day' is unnatural; use 'another day'. 'Tomorrow' needs a verb to show future activity: 'I will go again.' Suggestion: use correct articles with places ('the beach') and add appropriate auxiliary verbs for future tense. ID:11

× For example, whenever I went to Singapore last year and to Taiwan last month, and I think it's such a good experience for me.

✓ For example, whenever I went to Singapore last year and to Taiwan last month, I thought it was such a good experience for me.

The original mixes tenses and uses 'think' (present) with past events 'went'. Use past tense 'thought' and 'was' to maintain consistent timeframe. Also remove the extra conjunction 'and' before 'I think'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent when describing past experiences. ID:9

× I prefer in urban areas because I really think I'm 100% city girl and I do really enjoy to go to shopping mall to spend my time in the coffee shop.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I really think I'm 100% a city girl and I really enjoy going to shopping malls and spending time in coffee shops.

'Prefer in urban areas' incorrectly uses a preposition; say 'prefer urban areas'. '100% city girl' needs an article: 'a city girl'. 'Enjoy to go' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund: 'enjoy going'. Use plural 'shopping malls' and 'coffee shops' for general habits. Suggestion: after 'enjoy' use '-ing' form and include articles where needed. ID:8

× And if I go to rural areas, it's, uh, hard to see some kind of that things.

✓ If I go to rural areas, it's hard to see those kinds of things.

The phrase 'some kind of that things' is ungrammatical. Use 'those kinds of things' or 'that kind of thing' depending on singular/plural. Also avoid filler 'uh' in formal responses. Suggestion: match demonstrative and noun number: 'those' with plural 'kinds/things' or 'that' with singular 'kind/thing.' ID:26

× I prefer to see something new in other countries because, well, I think it's more comfortable and it's better for you, for me, because we can traveling around.

✓ I prefer to see new things in other countries because I think it's more comfortable and better for me, because we can travel around.

Problems include tense and verb form: 'we can traveling around' should be 'we can travel around' (base form after modal). 'It's better for you, for me' is odd; use 'better for me'. Also 'to see something new' is better as 'to see new things'. Suggestion: after modal verbs use base verb form; streamline pronoun references. ID:6