视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures now, avoid fillers (uh, however) and unnecessary age detail unless relevant, and add one or two specific reasons or an example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "but" or "since" correctly.

示例: I used to enjoy taking photos a lot, especially to share them on Instagram, but I don’t take many pictures anymore. Since 2020 my priorities changed and I prefer to focus on being present in the moment. For example, during recent trips I chose to enjoy the scenery rather than photograph every view.

建议: Answer directly with a clear preference or say you like both, then give specific supporting details. Avoid repeating the examiner's words and unfinished sentences. Use linking words (for example, "however", "while") to compare urban and rural views, and give a concrete example for each.

示例: I like both urban and rural views because they offer different experiences. In cities I enjoy historical buildings and museums that teach me about local heritage, while in the countryside I appreciate open landscapes and quiet nature walks. For instance, I love visiting old town centers to learn about architecture, but I also enjoy hiking in rural areas to relax.

建议: Give a direct answer (e.g., I enjoy both) and clarify with specific reasons and correct vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases like "it's always a time" and "hacked schedule"; instead say "busy schedule". Limit to 3–4 sentences and provide an example of how work affects travel plans.

示例: I enjoy scenic views both at home and abroad because each place offers unique culture and landscapes. However, I tend to visit my country more often due to family commitments and a busy work schedule. For example, last year I wanted to travel internationally but postponed the trip because of urgent projects at work.

× When I was 25 or 26 years old, I was very much involved in taking pictures of everything around me to show a picture on Instagram.

✓ When I was 25 or 26 years old, I was very involved in taking pictures of everything around me to post on Instagram.

Use simple past 'was' is correct but 'very much involved' is wordy; 'very involved' is natural. 'Show a picture on Instagram' is incorrect collocation — we 'post' photos on Instagram. Keep past tense consistent.

× But uh, however, uh, in 2020, my mindset has changed totally and I stopped taking pictures, however focusing.

✓ However, in 2020 my mindset changed completely and I stopped taking pictures to focus on other things.

Remove filler words 'uh' and redundant connectors 'but however'. Use past simple 'changed' to match 'stopped'. 'Has changed' (present perfect) is not appropriate with specific past time 'in 2020'. 'Totally' → 'completely'. Phrase 'however focusing' is ungrammatical; express purpose 'to focus on other things'.

× Do you prefer we use in urban areas? Urban areas?

✓ Do you prefer views in urban areas?

The student repeated and used incorrect clause 'we use in urban areas'. The examiner asked about 'views', so reply should mirror that: 'Do you prefer views in urban areas?'. Keep simple question form.

× I do prefer views on both the places urban as well as rural.

✓ I prefer views in both urban and rural places.

Use preposition 'in' with 'places' and idiomatic order is 'both urban and rural' rather than 'both the places urban as well as rural'. Remove unnecessary 'do' (not required in affirmative statements).

× In urban places, I would like to see the historical buildings, ultimately making my knowledge more advanced with respect to the ancestral things.

✓ In urban areas, I like to see historical buildings, which broadens my knowledge of the city's heritage.

Use 'areas' instead of 'places' for naturalness. 'The historical buildings' is only correct when specific; use 'historical buildings' generally. 'Ultimately making my knowledge more advanced with respect to the ancestral things' is awkward and ungrammatical — replace with concise phrase 'which broadens my knowledge of the city's heritage'.

× On the other hand, if I talk.

✓ On the other hand, if I talk about rural areas, I enjoy natural scenery and traditional villages.

Original is an incomplete sentence (sentence without a verb/complement). Expand to a full sentence that completes the thought about rural areas.

× I prefer views in my country and in other country too as I'm not biased but it's always a time.

✓ I prefer views in my country and in other countries too because I'm not biased, but it depends on time and opportunity.

Use plural 'other countries' and replace unclear phrase 'it's always a time' with 'it depends on time and opportunity'. 'As' can be 'because' for clarity.

× If I have a time I do visit in my country but due to hacked schedule of work sometimes I am not able to visit any of the places.

✓ If I have time, I visit places in my country, but because of my hectic work schedule I sometimes am not able to travel to any of them.

Use 'have time' (no article). 'I do visit' is unnecessary emphasis; use 'I visit'. 'Hacked schedule' is incorrect — correct phrase is 'hectic work schedule'. 'Visit any of the places' → 'travel to any of them' for naturalness.

× Doesn't matter in which country I am in.

✓ It doesn't matter which country I am in.

Add subject 'It' to form a complete sentence and avoid ending with redundant preposition 'in' twice. Original is a fragment and ungrammatical.