视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g. "relate to me" or "remind me of").

示例: I love photographing different views. As a film student, I often visit scenic spots on weekends or holidays to shoot landscapes; for example, last month I photographed an old pier that reminded me of my childhood, which helped me capture a nostalgic mood for a short film.

建议: Directly state your preference, avoid hedge phrases and repetition. Provide a clear reason and one specific example. Use a linking word (e.g. "because" or "for example") and correct phrasing like "untouched" or "less seen by city dwellers."

示例: I prefer rural views because they feel more untouched and authentic. For example, I like photographing small country lanes and farms, which often show scenes city dwellers rarely see and make interesting posts on social media.

建议: Be clear and concise. Give one or two specific reasons rather than vague economic claims; fix grammatical errors and avoid repetition. Use linking language to connect ideas (e.g. "because" and "for instance").

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I enjoy promoting local attractions. For instance, I photograph historic towns and national parks to share online, which can encourage tourism and support local businesses.

× Since I'm a film student, I go around places to see the views.

✓ Since I'm a film student, I often go to different places to see the views.

The original sentence is understandable but the adverb placement and verb choice are slightly awkward. Use 'often' to indicate frequency and 'go to different places' is more natural than 'go around places.' This keeps the present simple tense consistent for habitual actions.

× Often when I get a chance or I get holidays or on the weekends, I do visit many places to take the pictures of the views which can relate me or take me to the nostalgic past of my life.

✓ Often when I get a chance, during holidays, or on weekends, I visit many places to take pictures of views that remind me of the nostalgic past of my life.

Errors: redundant phrases and incorrect verb forms. 'Do visit' is unnecessary; simple present 'visit' is correct for habitual action. Use 'during holidays' and 'on weekends' for natural preposition use (preposition error and adverb placement). 'Take the pictures of the views which can relate me' is incorrect: 'relate me' is ungrammatical; use 'remind me' (correct verb and meaning). Also omit 'the' before 'pictures' and 'views' for general reference (article error). These changes fix verb form, prepositions, adverb placement, and article usage.

× Well it's a debatable question but in my point of view I would suggest I would prefer rural areas because it will capture the rawness of the things that haven't been seen by many people from the cities.

✓ Well, it's a debatable question, but in my point of view I would prefer rural areas because they capture the rawness of things that many city people have not seen.

Problems: repetition ('I would suggest I would prefer') and awkward subject-reference. Use a single clear verb phrase 'I would prefer.' 'It will capture' mismatches with plural 'areas'—use 'they capture' (subject-verb agreement). 'That haven't been seen by many people from the cities' is wordy and awkward; rephrase to 'that many city people have not seen' for natural word order and tense. Also add commas for clarity.

× Since many people are staying in the cities, I would suggest to take views and share it in the social media so people can see it.

✓ Since many people live in cities, I would suggest taking photos of those views and sharing them on social media so people can see them.

Issues: 'are staying in the cities' is unnatural for general fact—use 'live in cities' (present simple). 'I would suggest to take' is incorrect; after 'suggest' use gerund: 'suggest taking.' Pronoun disagreement: 'share it' and 'see it' refer to 'views' or 'photos' (plural), so use 'them.' Preposition: use 'on social media' not 'in the social media.' These corrections fix pronoun use, verb form, and preposition errors.

× I would definitely go for the views in my country because and they're because it, it can enhance the tourism sector also, which can contribute to our financial stability, which can bring people to many hopes of getting rich or getting more money.

✓ I would definitely choose views in my country because they can enhance the tourism sector, contribute to our financial stability, and give people hope of improving their income.

Problems: broken conjunction 'because and they're because it, it' is ungrammatical—remove redundancy and use a single 'because.' Pronoun 'they' refers to 'views' (plural) so use 'they can.' Remove duplicate filler words and awkward phrasing ('bring people to many hopes of getting rich or getting more money'). Replace with concise, natural phrasing: 'give people hope of improving their income.' Also use parallel structure for verbs 'enhance,' 'contribute,' 'give.' Article 'the' before 'views in my country' is unnecessary when speaking generally; 'views in my country' is sufficient.