视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and pronouns. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so, and) correctly to make the response coherent.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I started in high school when my teacher often asked me to use the camera because I had an eye for composition, so I practised framing landscapes and street scenes a lot.

建议: Give a direct, correctly formed topic sentence and then add a specific reason with an example. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, tenses) and more precise vocabulary (congested, traffic) will improve clarity. Use one linking word to connect opinion and reason.

示例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in Kelantan and enjoy open spaces. For example, I like photographing quiet paddy fields and traditional houses, whereas cities feel too congested and noisy for me.

建议: Answer directly and avoid filler phrases like “to be honest” twice. State a clear preference or balanced view, then give a specific reason and an example. Use correct verb forms and concise language to stay within the 5-sentence limit.

示例: I would like to visit other countries, for example New Zealand, because of their dramatic landscapes. However, I always return to Kelantan in Malaysia since it is my home and its familiar views are meaningful to me.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because most probably when I was in high school, I was used to be a like a camera woman, something like that.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because when I was in high school, I used to be like a camerawoman.

Errors: 'was used to be a like a camera woman' is incorrect. Use 'used to' + base verb to describe past habitual actions (Grammar Problem Type ID 5 Past tense issue and ID 8 Verb + -ing form). Also 'camerawoman' is one word and 'most probably' is unnecessary and awkward here. Suggestion: remove 'most probably', use 'when I was in high school' then 'I used to be like a camerawoman' to indicate a past habit. Note: The correction preserves present preference 'I do like' and fixes the past habitual clause.

× So I thought that I was a great student with a great perspective of taking a picture.

✓ So I thought that I was a great student with a great sense of perspective for taking pictures.

Errors: 'perspective of taking a picture' is awkward and unclear (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 Subject-verb agreement and ID 26 Sentence structure). Use 'sense of perspective' and plural 'pictures' to match the general activity. This yields a natural English phrase describing skill in photography.

× And somehow my teacher also always give the camera to me and my friends also giving it to me because I know how to take a good picture.

✓ And somehow my teacher always gave the camera to me, and my friends also gave it to me because I knew how to take good pictures.

Errors: Tense inconsistency and wrong verb forms: 'give' and 'giving' are incorrect in a past context (Grammar Problem Type ID 5 Past tense issue). Use past simple 'gave' for repeated past actions. Also change 'I know' to 'I knew' to keep past reference and plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout the clause for clarity.

× I thought of giving a.

✓ I thought of giving it a try.

Errors: Sentence fragment 'I thought of giving a.' is incomplete (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Add the object 'it a try' to complete the idiom 'give it a try.' This yields a grammatical, complete sentence.

× Actually, I really likes rural areas because I was growing up in rural areas in Kelantan.

✓ Actually, I really like rural areas because I grew up in rural Kelantan.

Errors: 'likes' is wrong with subject 'I' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 Third person singular issue and ID 27 Subject-verb agreement). Use 'like'. Also 'was growing up' is awkward for a general past fact; use simple past 'grew up'. 'in rural areas in Kelantan' is redundant; 'rural Kelantan' is concise.

× So I never like urban areas because it's quite congestion with the traffics and all, you know, right.

✓ So I never liked urban areas because they are quite congested with traffic, you know.

Errors: Tense mismatch 'never like' should match past 'grew up' context (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 Present tense issue vs ID 5 Past tense issue) — choose past 'never liked'. 'It's quite congestion' is wrong; use adjective 'congested' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'the traffics' is incorrect plural and article use; use uncountable 'traffic' (Grammar Problem Type ID 14 Incorrect use of quantifiers/22 Article errors). Also replace 'and all, right' with 'you know' for conversational tone.

× To be honest, this question is not that hard, but I would say if I'm going for travelling, I'm sure to give a try for other countries such as New Zealand and all.

✓ To be honest, this question is not that hard, but I would say if I'm going travelling, I would definitely try other countries such as New Zealand.

Errors: 'going for travelling' is ungrammatical; use 'going travelling' or 'going to travel' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8 Verb + -ing form and ID 6 Present tense issue). 'I'm sure to give a try for other countries' is awkward; use 'I would definitely try other countries.' Remove 'and all' as unnecessary. Adjust modal verbs for hypothetical: 'would' fits better than 'I'm sure to'.

× But to be honest, I will come back for Malaysia, Kelantan because that is where I growing up and all right.

✓ But to be honest, I will come back to Malaysia, to Kelantan, because that is where I grew up.

Errors: 'come back for Malaysia' uses wrong preposition; use 'come back to' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11 Incorrect use of prepositions). 'where I growing up' is missing auxiliary and wrong tense; use 'where I grew up' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5 Past tense issue). Removed 'and all right' as unnecessary. Suggestion: use clear prepositions and correct past tense for completed life events.