视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ปรับการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง และตอบอย่างชัดเจนเป็นประโยคหัวข้อก่อนตามด้วยเหตุผลสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมถ้าจำเป็น เช่น “because” หรือ “so” และหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำคำ (เช่น "personally" และ "actually" พร้อมกัน) ควรจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 4–5 ประโยค และแก้ข้อผิดพลาด เช่น "interesting" → "interested"

示例: No, I don't really enjoy taking pictures of views because I'm not very interested in photography. I prefer to just enjoy the moment rather than focusing on my camera. However, if someone asks me to take a photo, I will do it for them.

建议: ปรับคำศัพท์และการเรียงประโยคให้ชัดเจน ใช้คำที่ถูกต้อง (เช่น "urban"/"rural", ไม่ใช้ "upper area") และใช้ลิงก์เชื่อมสั้น ๆ เช่น "because" และ "however" เพื่อเชื่อมความคิด ระบุเหตุผลเฉพาะเจนว่าทำไมชอบมุมมองแบบใดแบบหนึ่ง และยกตัวอย่างสั้น ๆ

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy looking at city skylines and varied architecture. From a high viewpoint I can see many interesting buildings and busy streets, which feels lively. However, rural views can be peaceful, although they are not my first choice.

建议: แก้ไวยากรณ์และรูปประโยคให้ถูกต้อง ใช้เหตุผลเฉพาะเจาะจงและคำเชื่อม เช่น "because", "for example" และแก้คำผิด (เช่น "it have" → "it has", "other country" → "other countries") เพิ่มตัวอย่างหรือคำอธิบายสั้น ๆ เพื่อทำให้คำตอบชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ

示例: I prefer views in other countries, especially Japan, because its scenery is very unique. For example, cherry blossoms and historic temples create a calm and picturesque atmosphere. Visiting such places makes me feel relaxed and inspired.

× Actually, personally I don't like to take a picture because I'm not very interesting in in these things.

✓ Actually, personally I don't like to take pictures because I'm not very interested in these things.

Usage of 'interesting' is incorrect; the student needs the adjective 'interested' to describe their feeling. Also 'a picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match the general activity. Remove the duplicated word 'in'. Suggestion: use 'interested in' to show the subject's feeling toward the objects and use plural when speaking about the activity generally.

× I personally like upper area more because I can see many things from the upper view, but in the other hand the lower wheel is still pretty, but I think it's not really my type.

✓ I personally like the upper area more because I can see many things from a higher viewpoint, but on the other hand the lower area is still pretty, although I think it's not really my type.

Several issues: 'upper area' and 'lower wheel' are awkward; use 'the upper area' and 'lower area' or 'higher viewpoint' for clarity. 'Upper view' is better as 'higher viewpoint'. Use the idiom 'on the other hand' not 'in the other hand'. Replace second 'but' with 'although' or restructure sentence to avoid repetition. Suggestion: choose clearer nouns (area, viewpoint) and correct the conjunction to 'on the other hand'.

× For me I prefer other country not because my country is not beautiful but I really like Japan and I think the view of it is very fascinating.

✓ For me, I prefer other countries — not because my country is not beautiful, but because I really like Japan and I think its scenery is very fascinating.

'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' or 'another country'. 'The view of it' is awkward; use the possessive pronoun 'its' with 'scenery' or 'views'. Also add 'because' before the reason clause. Suggestion: use correct plural or article and use possessive pronouns for clarity.

× It have sakura many ancient building and it make me feel very calm and relaxed.

✓ It has sakura, many ancient buildings, and it makes me feel very calm and relaxed.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'has' and 'makes' (third person singular). Also 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'many'. Add commas to separate items. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular subject and pluralize nouns after quantifiers like 'many'.